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Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

0 posted 2010-07-16 03:39 AM

Not with pen and paper,
not with imagination,
but with a lifetime review
comes the definite knowledge
of failed experiments.

‘tis the makers and creators
that exceed their boundaries
and plan according to
a dream not meant to be
and I, the innocent,
bear the weight of failure.

And when that weight is lifted
there’ll be no golden trophy
or congratulatory smiles
for the experiment of “me”
made to give and receive
the impossible.

Try again, oh, try again,
but, no, not ere to be
for experiments are prone to weep
at repetitive failures
that sink the soul into dismay
time and time again.

And in the stand-off there will be
machinations beyond belief
and manipulative tactics
to lure again the innocent
into life’s experiment
but too there’ll be rejection
and no intake or uptake
of yet another lie.

Makers and creators!
There’s more to making life
than the wild and fanciful
concocted in the ether
absent and divorced from
a hard and unyielding
physical reality!

Helen / 16 July 2010

easy1
Senior Member

since 2010-05-22

Posts 1209
Southeastern USA

1 posted 2010-07-16 07:37 AM

An interesting read, and I think I can see what you are getting at. I've heard that talk is cheap, but expediency is expensive.

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

2 posted 2010-07-16 08:13 PM

"there’ll be no golden trophy
or congratulatory smiles
for the experiment of “me”
made to give and receive
the impossible."

sounds so familiar to me~~
maybe we are all just experiments

M

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

3 posted 2010-07-17 02:59 AM

Thanks for the read easy l and Maureen. Yes, that's what we are - experiments! I like to think though that someone somewhere knows what didn't work and won't repeat it. I, for one, am not repeating anything even "life" if I have a choice but, of course, I don't know all the facts yet.

Helen

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

4 posted 2010-07-17 08:13 PM

Your reply made me smile this evening, Helen.

I feel the same way!

M

Bastet
Member

since 2010-05-07

Posts 246

5 posted 2010-07-18 04:51 AM

Well, this poem, in any case, is a very successful experiment!

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

6 posted 2010-07-18 03:17 PM

Hi Maureen - I'm smiling too!

Bastet - I'm not sure whether a successful poem experiment has much meaning in the grand scheme of things but it was so nice of you to say so. Thank you.

Helen

Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

7 posted 2010-07-19 07:34 PM

There is so much wisdom in this beautiful poem, Helen. I think I like it more than any of your other poems.
Ida

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

8 posted 2010-07-19 11:48 PM

wisdom indeed

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

9 posted 2010-07-20 06:19 AM

Thanks, Ida and Dixie. Perhaps just the wisdom of the day in this ever changing thing called "life".

Helen

icebox
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

10 posted 2010-07-21 09:40 PM

Ah...good old physical reality.

Provocative writing!

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