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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana 
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I will not resist and purge Experience every urge Feelings will soon surge Upon the mental verge I will not say goodbye Holding through darkest night Upon the wind to fly Across the jealous sky I will not brave static acts Nothing spared which nothing lacks Through time making tracks Bending with broken back I will not suffer any oppression Defeat by the hand of depression Once, an absolute obsession Given to states of compression I will not, I must not cease Living on life’s shortened lease I must ride that restless beast There is time enough for peace |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
You seem very determined, dear J.! You give the impression of knowing how to ride the challenging waves. There is that kind of inner peace that can accompany the most vivid and demanding actions ... Very good work. Love, Margherita |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
Thank you Margherita. I am nothing if not determined. |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
It seems like you are trying different styles of poetry and I like what you are writing. My only thought about this one is the second line of the second stanza seems out of line with the rest of the format of the rhyme scheme of your poem. You do sound determined. I enjoy your writing. Alison |
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