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Muffins!
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Muffins! |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
Muffins! Muffin!Muffin!Piping hot! In the tummy hits the spot! What enticing cake or pie Could ever truly satisfy? In what empty hand or dish Sits the ghost of its kiss? On what plate dare it relax From a hand that sneaks a snack? And what fingers and what art Could mix a batter with such heart? And when the yeast begins to rise What a sweet smell and a sweet prize. What the raisin?What the bran? For what muffin is this pan? What the honey?What swift stir Forms a scrumptious muffin mixture? And when the cooks plop in the nuts And apply the streusel - no ifs, ands or buts! Do they know how good these quick breads can be If I ask them nice, will they make them for free? Muffin!Muffin!Piping hot! In the tummy hits the spot! What enticing cake or pie Could ever truly satisfy? with apologies to Blake and his Tyger |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
This sounds like something out of the south, you know like as in: "Sweet potato pie and hush my mouth"....very well done Mr. Brinkman |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Oh, the muffins are honored lovingly here! You are right, the sound in Blake's Tyger is similar, wondered after what you said. Enjoyed this very much. It's funny and has a fantastic rhythm. Love, M  |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Earl, This is cute, however, just how many cooks are involved here. In the line: "And when the cooks plop in the nuts" perhaps it would be best to say: "And when the cook plops in the nuts" Bobby |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
EB..I think the Romans provided bread for their subjects to keep them loyal...perhaps you have captured that value here..enjoyed it |
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Dadygoose Member
since 2010-01-01
Posts 162A Communist country |
My name is Pablov and, though I am usually a goose, today I am a Soviet dog. Just ring the bell and I’ll start salavating Japanese. :-----) Hey, nobody's human! |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
Thanks for reading this quirky little poem. Bobby you are correct. There are too many cooks. Sometimes when writing I get so wrapped up in rhyme and meter, which I find extremely difficult, that I neglect simple things. So if it is okay could I ask readers to change `they` to the personal pronoun of their choice! |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
That is certainly a great poem that is written with great rhyme and rythm. Keep them coming Earl for that was a joy to read. Lindsay |
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Lamar Cole Member
since 2009-05-01
Posts 274 |
Very Nice. |
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