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JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

0 posted 2010-06-16 08:01 PM

Coming Home

As she went
into the garden
she could hear a violin
playing in the distance
as she moved towards
her favorite shade tree,
a sleeping willow
that drank from
the gently running stream
that she adored,
the sounds that
soothed her heart
as the cool water
washed over the rocks,
the memories she shared
there with her lover
under the tree
beside the stream
within the garden.
In a moment
she would pray
to a loving God
that had blessed
her life with
the beauty of nature
and for the man
that she loved
who would soon
be coming home.

JamesLee
15June
2010

bel1e
Senior Member

since 2006-07-24

Posts 1631

1 posted 2010-06-16 08:24 PM

very niiice~

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

2 posted 2010-06-16 10:53 PM

Love the romance, such a beautiful sentimental write.

Nice, James~

Lamar Cole
Member

since 2009-05-01

Posts 274

3 posted 2010-06-16 11:42 PM

Very Lovely.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2010-06-17 01:55 AM

ah yes

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

5 posted 2010-06-17 01:56 AM

home...you can build it behind your eyes
carry it in your heart....
safe among your own

~James Taylor

easy1
Senior Member

since 2010-05-22

Posts 1209
Southeastern USA

6 posted 2010-06-17 02:31 AM

I was admiring the structure: except for one of 7 syllables, all the lines are between 3 and 6 syllables, and very well mixed for pace. Reading this piece is a bit like playing a tough tennis rally against somebody who knows how to use many variations of spin.

LindsayP
Member Elite

since 2007-07-28

Posts 3410
Australia, Victoria

7 posted 2010-06-17 10:25 PM

You paint a beautiful word picture with your poem James, much enjoyed.

Lindsay

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

8 posted 2010-06-19 05:05 AM

your words are sweet and true.

regards

yann

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

9 posted 2010-06-20 12:47 PM

JamesMichael - this is one of your best writings, amazing it is...

BC

Amaryllis
Senior Member

since 2010-05-20

Posts 1306
Mi now

10 posted 2010-06-20 02:09 PM

Very dreamy and beautiful.. I really liked.. for some reason it reminds me of the wooziness of The Talking Heads` "She Was"

.
Wonderful!
~Amaryllis

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

11 posted 2010-06-20 05:21 PM

nice

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