»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #46
»
Bee Dance
| Open Poetry #46 |
|
Bee Dance |
|
|
Bastet Member
since 2010-05-07
Posts 246 |
BEE DANCE Not for the apple blossoms’ assembling aromas Nor for the caramel caress of thick, liquid light. Not for the rumbling, rhythmic buzz Nor for the magenta fields drawn to checkerboard perfection. No, but for the dance, hypnotic power, ordered movement, rapid repetition, a dervish that communicates nearness to the hive, an easy flight to the source. The sickle dance, precise as the eye measuring the distance to the new moon, complex with a chasse or a twirl added to reach the sky-blush blooms. Black antenna vibrate like thick lashes, round abdomen wobbling, striped with gold, wings all glossy glitter, a figure of light, a straight course, two opposing semi-circles like two well-rounded breasts. Yes, next time I’ll be born a bee, choreography already programmed in. Let’s clone the bees, make sure they’re still here to teach us art, industry, economy, the dance of a well-ordered society. |
||
| © Copyright 2010 Bastet - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Wow! I bee impressed with your Bee Dance! Very descriptive and accurate! My son just put up his first bee hive a couple of weeks ago. Fascinating insects! I'll have to read your poem to him! Glad I happened in on your poem. Incidently, I haven't seen your name here before, but I haven't been here lately. I wish to extend a big welcome. WELCOME! miscellanea |
||
|
whisperingwalt Member
since 2010-04-29
Posts 240Coquitlam, BC, Canada |
Very well written..ww |
||
|
threadbear Senior Member
since 2008-07-10
Posts 817Indy |
you were right to write about the fascinating lessons from bees we can learn. A total symbiotic society. A special submission, Bastet, Jeff |
||
|
Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
LOVE IT! LOVE IT! LOVE IT! By the way, did I happen to mention I love this poem. The topic is unique, the poem is flawless factual flow. SWEET! ebm |
||
|
Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Bastet, As an old bee keeper from my country days, I like this poem. Make sure you smoke your hive real good so they get their tummies full of honey before you try and rob them. Bobby |
||
|
Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Bastet, this is one precious write! I think you really observed them well and love them, because your work does them full justice. May they go on with their essential contribution to the balance of Nature! Wonderful poem. Love, Margherita  |
||
|
latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Fascinating! Loved it. Welcome to these pages. A new slant on the life of bees with a message held within that held my interest. latearrival |
||
|
ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
masterful write |
||
|
ken206573 Member
since 2008-10-14
Posts 487 |
Enjoyed the poem, love the flow, and thier bee-utiful bee dance. They are truly interesting creatures. |
||
|
srizah Junior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 34India |
Wow, bee dance teaches a lot that I did not know and it also weaved it in, the lay of life at the end so beautifully Live Life! |
||
|
Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Oh Bravo.. just sublime! Loved this one.. as I said, I am a fan; your writing is captivating. I liked the choice to start slow, then up the tempo as you bring in the dance.. and the fine imagery here, also. Well-crafted! |
||
|
Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
This was written splendidly. |
||
|
Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Oh Bastet, please post another- eager to read more of what Bastet is Bestat!! (still loving this one.. a fave.) |
||
|
LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Welcome to PIP Bastet and if the bee-dance is a sample of your ability as a poet, I'm sure we can look forward to more great poems. You've done well. Lindsay |
||
|
Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Love the Bees and the honey... Lovely tribute to the little master class...  "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
