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Robert E. Jordan
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since 2008-01-25

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Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

0 posted 2010-05-19 11:06 PM

Bones is out on the street
a late and lonely night.

Fog horns are blowing
out on the river,
and if you listened closely enough,
you could hear the water
pushed aside
out in the main stream.

The train roars lonely
along the shaky old El
up at Kensington and Allegheny—
better know as K and A,
and Bones knows
he’s alone in the street,
so very alone.

Bobby

Bastet
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since 2010-05-07

Posts 246

1 posted 2010-05-19 11:56 PM

A very poignant portrayal of loneliness. You set the scene perfectly. The solitary figure of "Bones" stands out against the landsscape. Great poem.

Earl Brinkman
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since 2010-03-03

Posts 1183
Osaka, Japan

2 posted 2010-05-20 12:04 PM

You have painted a vivid picture of what lonliness means.

Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

3 posted 2010-05-20 01:38 AM

I can feel the loneliness that Bones is feeling here.
Ida

whisperingwalt
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since 2010-04-29

Posts 240
Coquitlam, BC, Canada

4 posted 2010-05-20 01:41 AM

Yo Bobby,
Good job on articulating the emotion of loneliness...but you know you never walk alone.ww

Eusta B. Mae
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since 2010-05-03

Posts 903

5 posted 2010-05-20 08:52 AM

Bobby darlin', you paint the ache of alone as it is and those of us that have felt it before, just felt it again-good capture
-Yo- Ouch Bones- ebm

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

6 posted 2010-05-20 09:08 AM

Bobby this is wonderful, this is Hopperian (as the painter) and you shows the solitude of modern life with a paintful talent...This is one of your best and if you don't mind I will keep it on my computer with other american poems...

regards

yann

Denise

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7 posted 2010-05-20 10:19 AM

I hear those fog horns on the river at night. Also the train whistles. I can hear both from my house at night (the El is a couple miles too far away for me to hear). They do have a haunting and lonely quality about them. You've expressed it well, Bobby!

Honeybunch
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since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

8 posted 2010-05-20 03:48 PM

So now Bones knows that it's all up to him and him alone - oh, if he doesn't believe, of course, in the invisible ones.

Helen

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

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displaced

9 posted 2010-05-20 04:06 PM

I sure can relate here

It seems I have been where you describe

Robert E. Jordan
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since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

10 posted 2010-05-20 08:15 PM

Thanks Bastet,

I'm happy the poem worked that way for you.

Thanks for the kind words.

Bobby

Robert E. Jordan
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Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

11 posted 2010-05-20 08:17 PM

Thanks Earl,

I'm glad you could see Bones loneliness.
Bobby

Robert E. Jordan
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Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

12 posted 2010-05-20 08:19 PM

Thanks dear Ida,

For your concern for Bones.

Love Bobby

Robert E. Jordan
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Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

13 posted 2010-05-20 08:21 PM

Thanks WW,

For the words of encouragement for Bones.

Bobby

Robert E. Jordan
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since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

14 posted 2010-05-20 08:23 PM

Thanks dear EBM,

I'm pleased the poem worked that way for you. Bones says hello.

Love Bobby/Bones

Robert E. Jordan
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since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

15 posted 2010-05-20 08:24 PM

Thanks Yann,

I'm glad the poem worked for you. Of course you can keep it.

Bobby

Robert E. Jordan
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since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

16 posted 2010-05-20 08:26 PM

Thanks dear Denise,

I'm glad you were able to see the poem. Thanks for the kund words.

Love Bobby

Robert E. Jordan
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since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

17 posted 2010-05-20 08:29 PM

Thanks dear Helen,

Bones has always had a lot of self confidance. He's also a firm believer, and good Catholic boy.

Love Bobby

Robert E. Jordan
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since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

18 posted 2010-05-20 08:31 PM

Thanks dear Passing shadows,

It's good that you know where Bones is coming from in this poem.

Love Bobby

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