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Glass Freckle Spheres.
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Glass Freckle Spheres. |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. 
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your hair rolled like shells in the tide and you brushed it with your fingers finding pathways through the sunlight you smiled in natural white and stuck your tongue out and bit it gently in a quiet laugh concerning our surroundings your freckles were like spheres of flawless glass on a sun tanned ballroom floor upon which I danced with you to the strings of your voice you were cold in the night, underneath the stars shining through the cool dark and I offered you my jacket and my love secretly hoping that you could accept both. Fall in love early, fall in love often. [This message has been edited by viking_metal (05-19-2010 10:59 AM).] |
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whisperingwalt Member
since 2010-04-29
Posts 240Coquitlam, BC, Canada |
"you were cold in the night, underneath the stars shining through the cool dark and I offered you my jacket and my love secretly hoping that you could accept both." What loving woman wouldn't? good job..really like the ending...who says chilvary is dead...well done.ww |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
A nice entry. The last two lines were special. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome piece! I hope she accepted both too, but if not, then it's her loss |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Thank you WW.  Early, thank you. Glad you liked it. Passing Shadows... Thanks love! Fall in love early, fall in love often. |
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SlowlyFallAway Member
since 2008-08-29
Posts 279North Carolina |
Good imagery. It's been a while since I've read your stuff but I see it's still just as good. |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
You are all too kind. Thank you. Fall in love early, fall in love often. |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I love when you write like this. A |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Thank you for resurrecting this, alaboo. I was wondering if you read what I posted anymore. Fall in love early, fall in love often. |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Heya you, I took a bit of away time and have much reading and catching up to do. If you ever wonder, just email and I'll let you know what's up. I missed your poetry. A |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
n-joyed it VM...some cool metas in this one |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
thanks daaaaawg Fall in love early, fall in love often. |
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