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Time and Pomegranate Wine
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Time and Pomegranate Wine |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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I am stained by pomegranate wine watching the sun and birds crack my skin recalling how I sucked each seed until my tongue was red and my fingers held the color I spent when persimmons sucked my mouth dry and yet each morning's mirror holds the sweet gloaming sound of the sun slipping up into another rising and I hear where doves hide under rafters loving feathers playing musical rooftops with the soft snore of a dog the same my finger's still hold the pomegranate's stain [This message has been edited by Martie (05-14-2010 04:32 PM).] |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Such a beautiful observation and one that transports the reader right by your side to see your sights, thank you for the seat... Goldenrose. Friendship is Love without his wings. Lord Byron. |
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threadbear Senior Member
since 2008-07-10
Posts 817Indy |
time stains our hearts like nicotine dyes fingers and the once green fruit that ripened within our limbs is now sienna, and ready to fall but like persimmons they can't be plucked early so we wait for them to drop in their own time and to be culled from the ground up. Jeff In tribute to your fine writing skills, Martie, as also are my hellos and best wishes to you. |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Goldenrose...I was inspired by you to use that beautiful word, "gloaming" Jeff....I love what you said, it's what I meant...I'm blessed by you and your friendship. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: Always a treat to read you, dear Martie! Wonderful and so vivid. Love, Margherita |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Martie, you are a miracle of illustrations through words...love the way your paintings speak...it's so so good to read you again! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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whisperingwalt Member
since 2010-04-29
Posts 240Coquitlam, BC, Canada |
A treat to read...really pulled my imagaination into your words...well done.ww |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Smiling...I remember my first pomegranate...found it at the Farmer's Market of my youth. I loved the pearly red seeds... just touching their jewel-like skin was remarkable enough. As are you. |
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Lamar Cole Member
since 2009-05-01
Posts 274 |
Very Nice. |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Margherita...you are always so gracious...thank you for that LeeJ...so good to know you read and still hang out here. Thanks for the comment appreciated. James...thanks for reading Hi whispering Walt...good to meet your imagination and you. Sunshine...of course you would know how they are...we are sisters, afterall Lamar Cole...nice to meet you. Thank you very much. |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
This one is rich with flavor. I like the style, flow, and word choice. As for those persimmons, might I suggest switching to the one that doesn't come to a point. I can't remember what they are called, but at least they don't suck every ounce of moisture out of your face when you eat them. I learned that lesson the hard way.  "We'll chase them like rats across the tundra." |
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