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srizah Junior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 34India |
Sleep ----- Do you know him? Your very initmate lover He's so close to you and you know him better than anybody else Every evening he comes out to watch over you (so to say) You do this and that and finally you surrender without your senses And he embraces you everyday with his succour - with the bounty to grow you He melds you in to the big consciousness You should love him and give his due You will relish it when you are not with him and indulge in other loves (People who know say this :) You need him more than material providence If you ignore him You will cease to be in seven to ten days Go to him everyday - see him keep your dreams for you He's waiting on you, He's waiting for you, Sleep. Your lover... P.S.: Everybody needs sleep, some are blessed with it and some even with aids need to sleep, but sleep they must. Sleep soothes the biggest of pains and heals the greatest of wounds and greets you with a new universe every time you wake up. I tend to sleep less. Recently I was awakened to my utter sleepfulness and I gave in. I present this one for "sleep" the great companion of people. Live Life! |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
How true! I like the way you personified sleep, Very good! ebm |
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srizah Junior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 34India |
Eusta, Thank you for the kind words. It makes my day. ~srizah~ Live Life! |
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whisperingwalt Member
since 2010-04-29
Posts 240Coquitlam, BC, Canada |
Well done...It was a good read..kept my interest and liked how you tied it all together at the end. ww |
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Bastet Member
since 2010-05-07
Posts 246 |
This one really makes me think. Very deep and philosophical. I think it goes beyond sleep. Expresses something of a divine presence. Or am I reading things in? Do you really live in India? It's a country I love. I think, from your style, you must have read Tagore and some of the other spiritual Indian poets. Anyway, thanks for your comments on my work. I look forward to reading more of yours. |
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srizah Junior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 34India |
Whisperingwalt, Thank you for appreciating my lines. Your words give me inspiration. Bastet, I am not so well read particularly in poetry. Tagore was learned from textbook. Every Indian will know Tagore since our anthem is penned by him and set to music. In my school textbooks there was a sampling from many famous poets - Milton, Tennyson, Yeats, Keats even Noyes (I am not able to quote any of them from what I learnt), but Tagore's was probably the only one in free verse. At that time, I read Tagore and thought "Is this poetry?" (but the words were powerful), and now I am writing without meter and rhyme and think "This is poetry". I appreciate that you like India. All my sensitivities belong to this land primarily though I freely dip into the world for sustenance and inspiration. Lastly I thank you for the interest in my lines. ~srizah~ Live Life! |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Where would we be without sleep?Nothing in this world would work without the sleep of humans,a thoughtful and well written write, thank you for writing it.. Goldenrose. Friendship is Love without his wings. Lord Byron. |
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srizah Junior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 34India |
Goldenrose, Thank you for your kind words. ~srizah~ Live Life! |
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