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Dare to Sing
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Dare to Sing |
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whisperingwalt Member
since 2010-04-29
Posts 240Coquitlam, BC, Canada |
Dare to Sing As we journey through this life Many thoughts we accumulate Some as sharp as a knife Other we just accommodate In some moments we behave Unlike the courageous of the land Hiding fearful in our caves Unwilling to lend even a hand Though our courage seems amiss When we stand and look away Ignorance is no longer bliss When the darkness turns to day To hide in the attic Will not silence thunder To get rid of guilt's static Or load that they're under We must leap to the defence Of the helpless and weak Wipe the tears from the lens Become the hero that they seek Dare to sing the new song That heals the wounded heart From all that went wrong When their hearts came apart. |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Whisperingwalt, Your well written poem has good rhyme and rhythm. I like it just fine. Bobby |
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whisperingwalt Member
since 2010-04-29
Posts 240Coquitlam, BC, Canada |
Yo Bobby, Thanks for the positive feedback. |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
"Dare to sing the new song That heals the wounded heart From all that went wrong When their hearts came apart" I like this stanza the best because it touched me the most, thanks- ebm |
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whisperingwalt Member
since 2010-04-29
Posts 240Coquitlam, BC, Canada |
You're welcome. Most of us or if not all of us have had the feeling of our hearts coming apart...nothing compares to hearing the song of unconditional love when that happens. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
beautifully written! |
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whisperingwalt Member
since 2010-04-29
Posts 240Coquitlam, BC, Canada |
Lee, Thanks for your positive words. |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Dare to sing the new song That heals the wounded heart From all that went wrong When their hearts came apart. Walt that is a very noble undertaking my friend. You wrote it well. Lindsay |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
Hiding in the attic while the weak are oppressed is no way to solve the problem. Like you say we have to dare to sing a new song. |
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whisperingwalt Member
since 2010-04-29
Posts 240Coquitlam, BC, Canada |
Earl & Lindsay, Thanks guys for taking time to read my poem and your feedback. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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