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Open Poetry #46

Under Black Willows

Huan Yi
Member Ascendant

since 2004-10-12

Posts 6688
Waukegan

0 posted 2010-04-27 11:01 AM

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Under black willows
By the dark river

When the moon has gone
And left behind only a dream
Of light

When the birds that sang
From dawn to dusk various
Oblivious tunes for things
Then forgotten have flown away

By the sea
Where no waves wash the shore
Among the mute houses
Whose gardens grew no flowers

Lost in the ever narrower corridors
The air touched with absence
The memory of never was

In the long night silences
You break my heart

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Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

1 posted 2010-04-27 11:46 AM

Delivers a melancholy punch with the skill of a champion. John.
Ida

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

2 posted 2010-04-29 11:00 AM

"The air touched with absence
The memory of never was"

...great lines, and as Ida said, very melancholic...well written

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

3 posted 2010-04-29 01:59 PM

Beautifully done. The loudness of a heart breaking in all that silence was heard.

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

4 posted 2010-04-29 11:40 PM

Hearts are like waves, you know. They break, and.....break again.

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1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

5 posted 2010-04-29 11:47 PM

stirring

touching

silence screaming

wonderful just wonderful

and heart breaking

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

6 posted 2010-04-30 12:17 PM

a heart broken

and willows black

hmmm

well I guess it's all in a state of mind

Klassy Lassy
Member Elite

since 2005-06-28

Posts 2187
Oregon

7 posted 2010-04-30 11:17 PM

"...of never was," comes "will it ever be,"
the dream of dream that lone hearts see ~
Would moonlight wake on dream come true
kiss sweeter sleep, heart bloom anew...

What a poignant poem and lacing shadows that weep.

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