Open Poetry #46 |
Ambulance |
RevengeIsMine Senior Member
since 2006-07-08
Posts 820Australia |
The sky was gray, the clouds were dark As I sat there in the park No child played or ran around My ears were filled with empty sound A sense of neglect in the air Druggie parents who do not care Passed out until another day The ambulance is on its way. In the home across the street Another child shall be beat Her silent screams and tears of pain Slowly driving her insane Her little voice, it won't be heard As she utters out a final word Her innocent life was stolen today The ambulance is on its way. In two houses to the right The parents of a young boy fight The boy hides his head, and plugs his ears Trying to calm his nerves and fears The mum is slapped across the face The dad is struck by a flying vase He pulls a gun, says she's gunna pay The ambulance is on its way. A teenage girl a few blocks down Fights a man who knocks her down She struggles, hits, with all her might But she won't win the battle tonight Her legs forced open against the wall There's no hero there to break her fall Her body's brusied, her mind is gray The ambulance is on its way. You know it won't be on time today, The ambulance is on its way. |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Thanks RM for the urban picture of facts and emotions, the poem is well done with its long and regular stanzas, it is the first time I guess I read you and I enjoyed it. have a nice day yann |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
The lines are stirring and the ideas neatly arranged. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
very sad nicely done |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
...don't think I will ever look at an ambulance the same way again...creative and stunningly visual write...thank you for sharing |
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Zeigeist Member
since 2009-12-09
Posts 311Michigan |
this paints a picture. you did good Zeitgeist |
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