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Moisture granules
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Moisture granules |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India 
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Moisture granules Tranquility embraced the subtle waves of the golden beach, Moisture soaks, ferments the granules in silent speech, Messy hatches of nets hang its face down on the soil boat, Wrinkle skin caressing tender bones, a big lump in my throat. A holy pilgrimage, husky rice, pomfret fish’s smells really fine, Calcium shells sells; in a watery hole a fair crab tastes its wine, Take an exciting ride with the illiterate, helpless little pony, Beware of the little thieves and the elderly idle smart phony. Humanity hides behind shady horizon, human race as gone absurd, Innocence trampled to pieces; infancy here is a caged bird, Hunters come from across the ocean; foolish are my own men, Agonizing but true, Paedophiles have found a new cozy den. ©Prasad.N March 11th 2010 All rights reserved to Prasad.N "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Hello Prasad, it is a long time since I read you, Your poem is so well written that it made me unconfortable to hear about peadophily, but some men are really sick and we can't ignore that...Thanks for the beautiful intervention. regards yann |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Hey, Prasad - I remember you (in my best "My Big Fat Greek Wedding" voice). You poem is very intricate and bounces me in and out of two realities. Nicely done, my friend. |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
a tough read, but as said before, the subject matter cannot be ignored...you have raised the issue in such a way that you get the point across with great clarity...thank you for not only sharing, but caring |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Thank Yann, for taking time to read and comment. Really appreciate it. Thank you LongJohn for commenting. Really appreciate it. Thank you Steve for comments too. Really appreciate it. "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Prasad, Having spent a great deal of time in India consulting on chemical plant construction, I do have one complaint. The pomfret fish. They always seemed to be small and boney there. Why is that? I found the pomfret fish to be much bigger and better in Mexico. Bobby |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Yo Bobby, Sorry,i haven't done much research on the fish.  "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Prasad, In general, I like Indian food very much, India is one of my favorite places for food. I like spicy foods. Bobby |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Prasad, my friend. So good to read your voice and see you once again. As I silently read this poem, I realized it had to be read aloud. So as best I could, I did...and was amazed at the difference in reading aloud as opposed to reading silently. So many s's... It was going well until I hit upon the crux of your poem...one of those poems that twist one at the end...with a bite of reality thrown into the visage of what could have been a wonderful adventure in a foreign [to me] country. Truth is what it is [and that's a variation of a remark I heard from my six year old granddaughter only yesterday.  ]Now, please...write more? Soon?  |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Yo Bobby, good to know you love Indian food. Thank you so much Sunshine for taking time to read my poem and such kind words of encouragement.  "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Nice to see you writing again, Prasad and doing your usual fine job of it. Ida |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Thank IDA for taking time to read my poem and commenting on it. Appreciate it. "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
The opening sentences are not merely beautiful but rich. But evil hinted at in the phrase `wrinkle skin caressing tender bones` warns us that danger towards children can be present anywhere. Such a sad poem. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
The opening stanza paints-- but this? Gave me chills: "Take an exciting ride with the illiterate, helpless little pony, Beware of the little thieves and the elderly idle smart phony." That's anywhere and everywhere and timeless. That is so insightful. You have much intrigue. Enjoyed. |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
The last line made me sit up and take notice, Prasad. . . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$! |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Thank you for taking time to read and commenting, Earl. Thank you for your kind words. Many underprivileged children are put under great risk however children all over world are also not far from such danger. Really appreciate your comments. Thank you for taking time to read and commenting, Serenity blaze. Thank you for your kind words. Realities are really eye openers. Really appreciate your comments. Thank you for taking time to read and commenting, Jerry. Glad to read your comments. Really appreciate your comments. "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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