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Rain Memories |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa 
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RAIN MEMORIES 17 December 2005 Curtains of soft grey mist and rainblack road and fresh green hills and fields - the silence shouts and you, my children, are again with me in Vernon, the Volkswagen Variant, voices bubbling and all of us lifted into a rain-excitement bathed in an unconscious happiness untinged with pain, and the memory crumples me. Owl |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Owl Your last line crumpled me. This was excellent. Lori |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
We are always on the edge, and certainly you have done well to convey that here. I like calm-ish rainy days, am glad that plants and little animals get relief from their thirst, but I do not like disasters. Thanks for a good read that I shall remember. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thank you, Lori. You got the real heart of it. Thank you, easy. I am glad you enjoyed it. Owl |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
a nostalgic read, Owl~~~ Thanks for the peek inside~*~ |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thank you, Belle. Yes, this was very much inside. Thanks for understanding. Owl |
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Spiros Zafiris Senior Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 982Canada |
..indeed; quite the emotional poem..very lyric, as is usual.."Persevere," the lilac sings..>>spiros |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I kind of like being crumpled now and then, though it's not as often as it once was good writing! |
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faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA |
i'm late getting here but here nonetheless...this is lovely...your imagery is wonderful as usual...it is always a pleasure to read you There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
your words are so vivid and descriptive...found it mesmerizing |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Spiros, I loved your reply – more lyrical than my poem! And yes, I believe I know what you mean and thank you. Thank you, Dixie – in my case, I don’t know about “liking” being crumpled, but I think allowing one to be, can be cathartic, and help to reverse the situation – or at least as much as it can be. Thank you, Faith. Late, early, in between – I have very little sense of time, so none of that is comprehensible or very important to me – my pleasure is you got here. Thank you for your very kind words. Thank you, Steaven. I am glad you enjoyed it so much. Owl |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Hi Owl, This is a great atmosphere with a family and a town (? I don't know Vernon)..Thanks for the enjoyable read. yann |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thank you Yann. The memory is of being on the open road with my children in my car which was a Volkswagen Variant to which I gave the name of Vernon. My present car is Gretta, the Jetta (again a Volkswagen, although I have had other types of cars too). Owl |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Tears filled my eyes-thinking back... Ida |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
ahhh Diana, you brought back memories of my own children and those carefree moments never to be found again except in our hearts our crumpled hearts |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Ida, I am sad and glad my poem did that for you. Hugs. Kate, I guess your memories, too, are bittersweet. Hugs to you too. Owl |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Memories can do that, as many mothers know. But I did have to smile, that you named your vehicle, as I do the same.   |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
I am sad that many mothers know. Thanks for your reply, Karilea. Owl |
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