writings from the 8th west ward

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faithmairee
Senior Member

since 2011-01-05

Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA

0 posted 2011-02-13 12:12 PM

what separates her from
the other patients is
she is not crazy
depressed and lonely
she knows the sooner
she begins to mingle
with them the sooner
she will be released

she tries to watch t.v.
in the recereation room
filled with zombie-eyed patients
gomer pyle is on the screen
making life seem more absurd
she can't stomach his supidity
and swiftly leaves the room

a man approaches her
telling her she looks
like she needs saving
or at the very least
someone to talk to
reluctently she tells
him of her guilt-ridden past
and she immediately feels
the burden lifted

later, she discovers
the reason he is a patient here
is he thinks he's Jesus
she laughs for the
first time in months
then goes to the
beauty parlor on the ward
and has her hair done

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

graying1
Member

since 2011-02-09

Posts 53
The Commonwealth of VA

1 posted 2011-02-13 06:00 AM

An interestion personage you write about

PS

Bastet
Member

since 2010-05-07

Posts 246

2 posted 2011-02-13 06:05 AM

I really like this poem. Great content and surprise ending. Thanks and keep going.

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

3 posted 2011-02-13 09:04 AM

Sounds like someone who has a great sense of humor. Very good detailed poetry of one of the "forgotten."

~ There's nothing worse than desiring more than you are desired.--Justine Cook / "Portrait" ~

faithmairee
Senior Member

since 2011-01-05

Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA

4 posted 2011-02-13 11:46 AM

graying1-thanks....i'm glad you found it interesting

Bastet-Thank you for stopping by and your wonderful remarks

JerryPat-thanks for the nice compliment

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

Spiros Zafiris
Senior Member

since 2002-10-20

Posts 982
Canada

5 posted 2011-02-15 02:23 AM

..well-written; captivates the reader..

faithmairee
Senior Member

since 2011-01-05

Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA

6 posted 2011-02-15 05:59 AM

Thank you, Spiros. You do me honor with your words.

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

7 posted 2011-02-15 09:26 AM

I didin't want to read this because of the title...but I had to because you wrote it. You did not disapoint.
Lori

faithmairee
Senior Member

since 2011-01-05

Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA

8 posted 2011-02-15 10:42 PM

thank you so much, Lori...i appreciate your kind comments

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

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