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bel1e
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since 2006-07-24

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0 posted 2011-02-08 12:56 PM

dear torpor,
dear taper,

your longing dwindles in the rain,
mine echoes its hollow chord,

is too fragile,

my wherewithall is yellow pine,
the dark needs tending
and you won't tell me where you've gone,

I 've a sorrow garden,
flowers that grow wilder each night,

I am the river's cold heart,
receding, I am nothing, really~

dear torpor,
we lived on daisies
and afternoon light in the doldrums,

dear taper,
you loved better than I,

your words abate now,
abandon me on riddled wings,

dearest regret, dearer than I,
the fruit of errancy tastes bitter, doesn't it?

anonymity is not a name, but a lull,
a threshold of nothing but silence,
a sanctuary diminishing. gone blank.

the husk of my life whittles into Kadayif~

tomorrow I will pour last night's storm
over my skin, catch it all in every pore,
the rain is grief-thick,

for without you
I am vulgar and uncouth.

Sunshine

Administrator

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since 1999-06-25

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Listening to every heart

1 posted 2011-02-08 01:04 PM

It is so good to read you...
I've missed you!

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2011-02-08 01:33 PM

THIS is excellent. Your wordplay is phenomenal and gut-wrenching. Yes, I like this very much.

~ Some people are like a Slinky -- not really good for anything -- but you still can't help but smile when you shove them down the stairs. ~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

3 posted 2011-02-08 01:33 PM

"the rain is grief-thick," Loved that line.
Goot write!
Lori

OwlSA
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since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

4 posted 2011-02-08 03:49 PM

This, like all your work, is POETRY with a capital Y – in originality, in word choices and associations, in cadence, in magical mind-meanderings, in sensitivity, but most of all in utter beauty and the way you hold me (and I am sure all your other readers) enthralled from the first word to long after the last. Just for the record, I love the “vulgar and uncouth” in the poem and it comes across clearly what you mean, but I just have to say that anyone – with or without “him” - who can write such poetry is as far away from vulgar and uncouth, as the North Pole is from the South Pole.

Owl

bel1e
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since 2006-07-24

Posts 1631

5 posted 2011-02-08 06:58 PM

Sunshine~

always a pleasure to bask in your light ~

xoxoxox

bel1e
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6 posted 2011-02-08 06:58 PM

Jerry~

thank you kindly ~

~love & light~

bel1e
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7 posted 2011-02-08 06:58 PM

Lori~

thanks so much !

bel1e
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8 posted 2011-02-08 06:59 PM

Owl~~

thank you for the peek inside~~~

those are some deep and kind eyes you have there~

~love & light~

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

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By the Seaside

9 posted 2011-02-08 09:07 PM

You are such a grand fine poetess.  I love the layers in this!!

Your poem is one honest to goodness overgrown garden, that perhaps the heart tends to out of necessity, out of love.
It is difficult to walk away from the tender beauty and fragile memories that rooted long ago.

I mean to say I love this very much, and I apologize in advance for my overly done interpretations.

I am visualizing a meadow of wildflowers bending in the wind...

Lovely,  you~

bel1e
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since 2006-07-24

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10 posted 2011-02-08 09:43 PM

Thanks Blue~*~*~
no apology necessary...your interpretations are music to my ears~

love & light

steavenr
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11 posted 2011-02-08 10:57 PM

there are some powerful phrasings in this one...I think my favorite lines are:

"your words abate now,
abandon me on riddled wings"

...a very cool, intriguing write...enjoyed

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

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12 posted 2011-02-08 11:08 PM

This aches with longing, but quite beautifully...I know this feeling so well I wept with you.

bel1e
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13 posted 2011-02-09 08:41 AM

Thanks so much, steavenr~~I am so glad you enjoyed this~

love & light

bel1e
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14 posted 2011-02-09 08:44 AM

Serenity~~~

Thank you.

At the time this was written...I was rife with it....my tears have since dried...and the heart a little bit harder now, but strong~~endures...and that is all we can ever do...for the alternative...would be an entirely different poem alltogether~~

Thank you always...for sharing the vein...

xoxoxox

faithmairee
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since 2011-01-05

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Poe Haven, USA

15 posted 2011-02-09 10:11 AM

powerful ending to a finely penned piece....great poem

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

bel1e
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16 posted 2011-02-09 10:27 AM

thanks faith !

Dark Stranger
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West Coast

17 posted 2011-02-09 12:36 PM

ya could have just said you missed the river? perfect stuff little one...you are lovely when vulgar

bel1e
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18 posted 2011-02-09 01:12 PM

hahahahahaha~~ it wouldn't be poetry then, Daddy~

LOL

Thanks for the peek inside~~~

xoxox

serenity blaze
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Posts 27738

19 posted 2011-02-09 05:24 PM

It's taken me a long time to understand that living is not an affront to the dead, and continuing to love is not a rebuke of the memory of passion.

Once upon a time I might have believed that bit about a hard heart--but these days, as I look back, I think I understand that a woman merely appears to be so when she is determined to protect the flame which so warms her, illuminates, and quickens her spirit to a re-animation of herself which is so exhilarating that appearances be damned along with popular opinion.

Oh my.

That was a lot of words to say I think I understand now. *hugs* I found one of my own.

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

20 posted 2011-02-09 06:15 PM

Fine writing...James

bel1e
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21 posted 2011-02-09 06:16 PM

Serenity~~

you have such a deeply intuitive and poetic soul....thank you for the kind words and the insight that is always so on-target...thankfully these Blue pages have always been hearty enough to hold the bleeding heart...and thankfully...there are writers here who do not hesitate to lend their own pulse, blood sweat and tears to those things that speak and move deepest in our hearts...

thank you again, beautiful lady~

bel1e
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22 posted 2011-02-09 06:17 PM

Thanks so much, James !

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