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Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

0 posted 2011-01-06 02:17 PM

Heartsleeve left in the rain
for places and faces unknown
The kindness of strangers
despite all the dangers
was where she was goin'
to see how she looked
in their eyes
She needed a new opinion
of herself to believe in
and strangers tell the best lies.
LGR(C)1/6/11

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

1 posted 2011-01-06 02:22 PM

Out of the frying pan into the fire?

Nice economy of words to get your scene painted. The reader fills in the blanks easily here and adds a great deal.

Good stuff Lori!

Eric

ain't doin nothin at all just answerin the call
and kinda driftin away from it all

faithmairee
Senior Member

since 2011-01-05

Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA

2 posted 2011-01-06 02:26 PM

you said alot in very few words and i like that...this poem has the ring of truth to it...nice work!

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

Rex Allen McCoy
Member Elite

since 2000-01-30

Posts 2863
Sippin a Timmy's in London

3 posted 2011-01-06 02:29 PM

be careful of strangers ... especially the ones with candy

enjoyed this one

JerryPat
Senior Member

since 2010-10-30

Posts 1991
Louisiana/America

4 posted 2011-01-06 02:58 PM

Candy us dandy, but . . .

Do what you have to do, just do it right.

~ Intolerant people are the people who do not believe the way we want them to,
which makes us intolerant by default.—July 26, 2010 ~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

5 posted 2011-01-06 03:00 PM

Eric, glad you like my stuff!
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faithmairee, yes, it isn't a pretty truth though.
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Rex- what? No candy? darn!
Lori

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

6 posted 2011-01-06 04:07 PM

hey Jerry you slipped in on me!

"Do what you have to do, just do it right."
...and who gets to be the judge of that?
Lori

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

7 posted 2011-01-14 12:11 PM

...cool write, with such a nice twist at the end...

"She needed a new opinion
of herself to believe in
and strangers tell the best lies."

...love that line

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

8 posted 2011-01-14 12:17 PM

A clincher!

Very good!

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