Blues Creeps In (Diatelle)

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Open Poetry #47

Blues Creeps In (Diatelle)

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

0 posted 2012-01-20 11:03 AM

fear
snuck in
it had been
hid until now
it smiles and then it grins
I have to wipe my fevered brow
fear I refuse entrance, I won't allow
it wants to torture me for things I did back then
this time fear will not find me I avow
I am not like I was back when
living for pills and gin
please tell me how
blank out sin
its twin
tear

©Jerry Pat Bolton

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways ~*~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

1 posted 2012-01-20 11:10 AM

Way cool! Love it Jerry!

Lori

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2012-01-20 11:11 AM

Hi Lori. Thanks.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways ~*~

bel1e
Senior Member

since 2006-07-24

Posts 1631

3 posted 2012-01-20 12:54 PM

see...I could never do anything so artistic with a poem~and esp one with such a great message~ Great stuff Mr. Pat~

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

4 posted 2012-01-20 01:12 PM

Yes you could, Baby Girl. It isn't nearly as difficult as it looks. I mean, I did it, anyone can.

Thank for your kind words . . .

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways ~*~

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

5 posted 2012-01-20 02:38 PM

I'm not familiar with the form but you did well with it... A good concept and strong ending. Fear is the devil... Or of the devil anyway... You do have power over it.

Michael

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

6 posted 2012-01-20 03:07 PM

Eh, it is just a matter of writing a poem in the shape you see. Darkness is many thing, but you are correct it stems from Satan, and there is a way to fight and overcome it. Unfortunately many people, myself included, thrash around for years, decades, before they find the right way to combat it.

Thanks Michael . . .

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways ~*~

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