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Dead romance |
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twistedpup Member
since 2011-02-25
Posts 115 |
Like the skeleton of a fish decaying on the beach. No meat just brittle bones and two hazey eyes staring at you. Longing for the refreshing waters from where it came. This romance is the same. Our conversations have no meat. Argueing constantly. Like our feelings mean nothing. We use threats of leaving, yelling and blaming. Words over open wounds,like salt stinging. Longing for a refreshing drink of what we used to be. Does this mean anything? Don't you see this is nothing like it was. All of it just seeming so lost. Where once understanding stood now just a reflection of the affection that once was. Now seeming alone at night no longer a priority to wish sweet dreams just a txt seeming so empty It takes an argument to say i love you or you love me. Like a fish decayed on the beach this romance has no meat. Just brittle bones and hazey eyes left wondering Do you see what i see? *hugs* [This message has been edited by twistedpup (01-19-2012 09:16 PM).] |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
"It takes an argument to say i love you or you love me. Like a fish decayed on the beach this romance has no meat. Just brittle bones and hazey eyes left wondering Do you see what i see?" Heartbreaking! Very bad situation, but you composed the emotion so well. JL  Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Exquisite poem, twistedpup, though I feel your pain. Don't really (just a little though) mean to be punny, but my unasked for opinion is that if you are wise and strong, you will leave him rotting on the shore and consider the other fish in the sea, as difficult as that may be for you at the present moment. There are many beautiful varieties. Sorry if you find my comment offensive. It was meant to be supportive and wise. Smiles. Owl |
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twistedpup Member
since 2011-02-25
Posts 115 |
thank you all so much infact he got to hear this poem and he was woken up. also no offense taken *hugs* |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Pup...enjoyed your pen as usual...cool bindings on your pen here |
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