Open Poetry #47 |
Friday Night |
roomandboard Junior Member
since 2011-12-21
Posts 13 |
Pool table, Pool balls, cue stick. They breed big boys here, on the western side of an eastern state. Packed tight into a bar in a corn field that looks like a log cabin where my cousins go every weekend. Short hair, loud mouths, imposing stares. imposing words, yelling at each other, pressing into us. Belly up to the bar running hands through my hair, looking at your short Daly City breed, Giants baseball cap, cute, fat, rosy cheeks a smile with bad, vampire teeth, I’m bored out of my mind. Quarter table Fifty cents on the sidebar. Name on the chalkboard Our turn to play the winner. Smoke fills up the space under the hanging light above the pool table. You have stopped paying attention in order to watch the ball game. One of the big boys, eyes half shut with drunk, keeps staring at me. Brunette desperately looking for a husband with quick bar banter, and a bad forced laugh, keeps getting in the way of my stick. Eight ball, first ball in, I lose. A round of tequila shots; a country song chorus toast. Last call, coats on, out into snow flurries, the pickup truck next to us is weaving. A whole bottle of wine in my belly, I’m running through the apartment, fighting with you from frustration. Take me to bed. We’ll sleep in tomorrow and have brunch at the diner. |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I really like this. It reminds me of places I have lived. Welcome to PiP. Your first poem makes me want to read more of what you have to share. Alison |
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roomandboard Junior Member
since 2011-12-21
Posts 13 |
Thanks Alison. I'm happy to be here! |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Me too! |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Oh boy, does THIS bring back some memories. Welcome to PiP, hoe you enjoy your stay here. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways ~*~ |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Welcome to Passions, R&B! You took us right into the evening with you... I look forward to reading more of your work. |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
I really like this as well. I really enjoyed it -Juju |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Very good read, (and feel), my friend, held me to the end, almost perfect end. j. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Welcome to Passions! A fine introductory poem/story - well rounded with imagery, filling the senses... good job! Please check your email for a Very Special Greeting! "The business of the poet...is to show the sorriness underlying the grandest things and the grandeur underlying the sorriest things." Thomas Hardy |
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roomandboard Junior Member
since 2011-12-21
Posts 13 |
Thanks for all the feedback everyone! |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
great first post - welcome to passions! Love is the life of the soul... |
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