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roomandboard
Junior Member

since 2011-12-21

Posts 13

0 posted 2012-01-18 11:35 PM

Pool table,
Pool balls, cue stick.

They breed big boys here,
on the western side of an eastern state.
Packed tight into a bar in a corn field that looks like a log cabin
where my cousins go every weekend.
Short hair, loud mouths, imposing stares.
imposing words,
yelling at each other, pressing into us.
Belly up to the bar
running hands through my hair,
looking at your short Daly City breed,
Giants baseball cap,
cute, fat, rosy cheeks
a smile with bad, vampire teeth,
I’m bored out of my mind.

Quarter table
Fifty cents on the sidebar.
Name on the chalkboard
Our turn to play the winner.

Smoke fills up the space under the
hanging light above the pool table.
You have stopped paying attention
in order to watch the ball game.
One of the big boys, eyes half shut with drunk,
keeps staring at me.
Brunette desperately looking for a husband
with quick bar banter, and a bad forced laugh,
keeps getting in the way of my stick.

Eight ball, first ball in,
I lose.

A round of tequila shots;
a country song chorus toast.
Last call, coats on,
out into snow flurries, the pickup truck next to us is weaving.
A whole bottle of wine in my belly,
I’m running through the apartment,
fighting with you from frustration.
Take me to bed.
We’ll sleep in tomorrow and have brunch at the diner.

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

1 posted 2012-01-18 11:53 PM

I really like this. It reminds me of places I have lived. Welcome to PiP. Your first poem makes me want to read more of what you have to share.

Alison

roomandboard
Junior Member

since 2011-12-21

Posts 13

2 posted 2012-01-19 12:06 PM

Thanks Alison. I'm happy to be here!

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

3 posted 2012-01-19 02:50 AM

Me too!

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

4 posted 2012-01-19 06:52 AM

Oh boy, does THIS bring back some memories. Welcome to PiP, hoe you enjoy your stay here.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways ~*~

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

5 posted 2012-01-19 07:52 AM

Welcome to Passions, R&B! You took us right into the evening with you... I look forward to reading more of your work.

Juju
Member Elite

since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

6 posted 2012-01-19 10:31 AM

I really like this as well. I really enjoyed it

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

7 posted 2012-01-19 11:25 AM

Very good read, (and feel), my friend, held me to the end, almost perfect end.
j.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

8 posted 2012-01-19 01:11 PM

Welcome to Passions! A fine introductory
poem/story - well rounded with imagery,
filling the senses...

good job!

Please check your email for a Very
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"The business of the poet...is to show the sorriness underlying the grandest things and the grandeur underlying the sorriest things." Thomas Hardy

roomandboard
Junior Member

since 2011-12-21

Posts 13

9 posted 2012-01-19 01:31 PM

Thanks for all the feedback everyone!

tracie66
Member Elite

since 2000-01-18

Posts 4713
Australia

10 posted 2012-01-20 03:39 AM

great first post - welcome to passions!

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe
— W. E. Channing

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