Open Poetry #47 |
the tail of a shooting star |
tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
just once I'd like to ride the tail of a shooting star imagine the ride I'd have traveling from Jupiter to Mars I'd tip my hat to the sleepy moon blow a kiss to the milky way hover over mercury beckon her to play I imagine the indigo sky to be filled with celestial showers and all the while the sleepy moon whiles away the hours Love is the life of the soul... |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
take me with you! ~fantastic!~
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Yeah, that'd be one hell of a ride alright, tracie66. I wouldn't mind tagging along for that little trip. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
That would be quite a ride. Very nice! |
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l'artiste Junior Member
since 2011-12-01
Posts 19Washington |
Oh, how amazing this would be... I love the poem. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
can picture us all hanging on for dear life. Love is the life of the soul... |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
Oh well, if we get tossed off in the Milky Way, we can go dancing there. A friend tells me he's saving one for me midst all the stardust. We should be able to catch another cosmic flight out! Tracie, I love the light-hearted whimsy of this. What a ride, to be sure! ~K |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Well, dear Tracie Maree, you just painted my favorite scenery. We are at home among the stars ... your words make me feel at ease within my element. Always in flight ... Very lovely dream write. Margherita |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
K & Margherita - glad I could take you on this starry ride of mine Love is the life of the soul... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Nice write, remember to send a postcard. JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
I saw the full moon tonight, whiling away the hours, on the western horizon. This poem reminds me of that moon, but although I looked close, I didn't see the comet you were riding..and yet, by reading this poem...I know you were there.....:-) Lovely work, Tracie |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
thanks James & JL you didn't see me waving then Ice? shame, was so hard trying to hang on while holding onto the tail of a shooting star with one hand thanks for your comment. Love is the life of the soul... |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
This is so charming, Tracie. I want to go too. Love it. Alison |
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Michael
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
This is an embraceable dream. I can think of no place I’d rather be right now. Michael |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I like the way you think... and hope you get your wish! *S* |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
Enjoyed your poem, Tracie. Ms. E |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
thanks Alison, Michael, Suthern & Miss E - would be the best ride, especially as all of you would be coming along for "the ride" Love is the life of the soul... |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I love the young and whimsical play of this... and you made me wonder - and think - we enjoy the daylight, but miss so very much what the moon could [can] share. Enjoyed, Tracie! |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh, I want to come along too Tracie! Thanks for the great smile and the wonderful trip ... I loved this momentary journey! Best wishes, /Kit |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
I think I'll leap into your contrail, my friend; I'd then be following the trail of a real, live shooting star!! j. |
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katahdin Senior Member
since 2010-07-01
Posts 1196ME. In the Shadow of the Mt. |
Too cool! Thanks for the inspiration. Kat >^..^< |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
we're building a tail longer than the shooting star itself - what a ride. Thanks everyone for your lovely comments & for reading my lil poem. Love is the life of the soul... |
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