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Solitary Circle |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa 
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SOLITARY CIRCLE 26 January 2011 It is the path ahead fed with memory-alones stones white flight-marking ring flowers bowers green seen desolate. Owl |
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The_Doctors_Angel_32 Member
since 2011-01-14
Posts 337Florida, USA |
Very beautifully written. I could feel the aloneness in the words. I truly enjoyed the read!!!  When the family is together, the soul is at peace - Russian Proverb |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Wonderful list of reflections that display acceptance yet yearning for something more.....Oh, you're good! Eric Forget the Psychiatrists they just find out all about you and sell you back to yourself! |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thank you, Julie for your kind words and for feeling my poem so well. Thank you, Eric, for understanding my poem so well. I am honoured. Owl |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
I love how you play off the last words of each line with the beginning words of each following one...but, I have to admit...I'm going to have to go back a few more times to 'get it' on the content... |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
quite an interesting 'write' ! (about feelings all too familiar) Very well 'penned' indeed!! |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thank you for noticing the rhyme pattern, Steaven. It was more important for me that somebody notice that, than interpret the content. Thank you for caring about the content. What I was referring to was old age alone with memories and a flowerbed surrounded by white stones and a green bower with nobody else there. [The flowerbed at my horse’s grave has its perimeter marked with white stones, but it isn’t in the shape of a circle – it is in the shape of a heart.] Thank you, Bruce for your always kind words. They are much appreciated. Owl |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
There is a lot going on in this simple and elegant poem of yours, Diana. Sadness, longing, but also strength and somehow a trace of anticipation in spite of it all. Excellent piece.  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
For some reason, desolate, for me, would be a wilted brown...because green, for me, brings life... but still? I see this...and it is good, and sad. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thank you Karen, for your very lovely comments on my poem. I am very honoured. You “get” what it’s about completely. Thank you Karilea. Personal desolation amid life abundant is desolation indeed. Owl |
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