Open Poetry #47 |
Sanderlings (revised) |
jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Sanderlings Where the surf overturns . . . wet foot prints - running, three toes all facing the same way - . . . fiddler crabs roll up the sand. sanderlings race salt's foamy edge, and she stands there, knee deep, long, wet, black dress swirling in the churn - part of, came from . . . is the sea. . . ~~~~ Breeze captured the sun, pushed it down, down - merged it with the sea laid it beneath distant waves . . . and she emerged in the dark her face glowing white, like waves touched by moonbeams rushing up the sand in the night - sanderlings rushing from her path. © wesley james beard, jr. december 2011 [This message has been edited by jwesley (12-31-2011 02:13 AM).] |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Ah what a pristine write. I can hear the surf and the gulls. Enjoyed the journey. JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Ah, Poet, I love this. A |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Exquisite, Jimmy, I can smell the sea. Owl |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Oh I do love the sea; next to the moon, 'tis one of my favorite things to include in poetry. There's such a vastness and timeless beauty in this poem. This is truly lovely... |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Fantastic imagery, my friend. The woman? Great concept keeping her visible, but distance. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Thank you, my friends, for reading, replying and just being there... j. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
I really loved this one... such beautiful and sound writing. The last stanza was amazing to visualize and read. Well done. Michael |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Breeze captured the sun, pushed it down, down - merged it with the sea laid it beneath distant waves . . . and she emerged in the dark This mesmerizes in its beauty... you words are so vivid I'm not just reading, I'm THERE. *S* |
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