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Silent Devotion
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Silent Devotion |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida 
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know this, that as surely as i know the sparrow as it flies; i love you. somewhere in the silence are your dark eyes; black as pebbles, soft, round stones i clasp tightly to my breast. you are the path i moved along in my young yesterdays, tree-lined and smelling of jasmine. know that i sat, a dream fallen from good-bye, a study in imperfection, yet you smile, and it is home and you string my tears to show me rainbows. how flat my world was with its colors in two dimensions, a swatch a windless flag and oh how it fattened up, round and full as the moon white and shining in the dark night. my heart feels like a leaping thing, a tremor in the palm of your hand. i know that the sparrow flies on your winds, and i breathe them in gasps. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
What stands out is this , , , "my heart feels like a leaping thing, a tremor in the palm of your hand." I know that feeling quite well and it is not something that I like. Quite a poem of love and despair, and sometimes hopelessness, which sometimes go hand in ankle. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
This is quite the poetic event, dear Nicole! Absolutely enthralling! Margherita  |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
I love your poetry.....:-) |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
yet you smile, and it is home and you string my tears to show me rainbows. how flat my world was with its colors in two dimensions, I almost copied the entire poem because each and every line is fantastic... but these define for me the difference between alone and loving... and how one person can change your world just by being. Beautiful, beautiful, leaves me breathless beautiful!! |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Which verse… should be called astonishment? For the one that is, is but a shadow to them all… How could something so piercing be silent? This is the sound of “Silent Devotion.” Love the way you write!! Very enticing. Suthern said it: "Beautiful, beautiful." Yep!! JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Wow, Nicole, do you ever get tired of me telling you how amazing you are? You have a way of stirring things in me I thought were dead. Truly stunning, and more in a hand-in-hand type of way. quote:All I can say is ditto! Michael |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Jerry - Oh it absolutely can be a terrible feeling; it is a very vulnerable moment. Only in the wrong hands though. Margherita - Thank you very much! ice - What a lovely thing to say, thank you suthern - There is nothing quite like home, is there? That's the crux of it... "just by being"... exactly JL - Your reply was beautiful! I've lost my words, trying to express my gratitude. Michael - hand in hand, indeed... you and your ditto.  I'm so pleased you like it. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Loved in particular, the last two lines of this wonderful piece, my friend . . . well written. j. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
perfectly written, I particularly loved the last stanza  Love is the life of the soul... |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Exquisite, Nicole. Owl |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
All I can say is "All of the above" Enchanting and lovely and all the rest applies. jo |
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Spiros Zafiris Senior Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 982Canada |
..very attractive writing style ..now i'll know to look out for more of your poetry..>>spiros -------- |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
this is lovely~ |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
J, thank you my friend Your replies are always uplifting and make me smile.tracie, thank you! owl, (hugs) thank you, dear jo, I so appreciate your comment, thank you spiros, what a high compliment, I thank you belle, thank you |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
This is sublime. I had a moment of jealousy as I wished I had written this (or was capable of writing this!). Than you for sharing it. Alison |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
A fine poem to welcome in a new year, such love and devotion, such description and phrasing and beauty almost beyond words..but you managed it with ease, enjoyed your lovely poem...thank you for it.. Goldenrose. Friendship is Love without his wings. Lord Byron. |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Alison (hugs) nothing to be jealous of in me; your writing is sublime in and of itself. Goldenrose - Thank you so much, for such a lovely reply. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Nicole, this was absolutely beautiful~~ especially when reading it aloud. M |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
Pure beauty in this Love Poem, love the way you express yourself Nicole. Ms. E |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
M and Ms E - thank you ladies, very much |
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