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EmmaRose
Senior Member

since 2011-03-02

Posts 1376
Midwest

0 posted 2011-12-17 09:38 PM

He said they'd be fine
come the top of the morning
all would renew itself
from the twilight of atrophy
deep in the trenches
born with their boots on
stiff in their awkwardness
they reach out in prayer pose

I could hear cries
through the hollows of branches

he said they were free now
from the load on their shoulders
and the sun would lay down again
in rivers of gold
between their frail skeletons
feet caked in mud
in the cross of the forest

the evening is swallowed
in a pondful of silence
the echoes of loneliness
seek the respite of rapture

and I wait for the golden one
to break through the mountains
and deliver the promise
to those who come reaching.

[This message has been edited by EmmaRose (12-18-2011 09:31 PM).]

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2011-12-17 09:54 PM

This is just awesome, dear EmmaRose. Your words touch the heart and the emotion lingers, heavy with sadness and yet pregnant with hope.

Love,
Margherita

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2011-12-17 10:19 PM

Ah, to finally be free from that load on their shoulders. Rumor has it that they'd be fine by morning-time, and I see them all reaching and hoping for the words of that last verse to play out.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Nicole
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since 1999-06-23

Posts 1835
Florida

3 posted 2011-12-17 10:39 PM

There is such a quiet strength in your poetry; and I can't help but remain captivated throughout.

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

4 posted 2011-12-18 01:17 AM

EmmaRose, whether I have understood this or not, I surely can see how superbly written and very beautiful, deep and sensitive it is. I understand it to be the ending of the war in Iraq and American soldiers returning home being an analogy/parable for the Christmas story and the promise of Christ to return.

Owl

EmmaRose
Senior Member

since 2011-03-02

Posts 1376
Midwest

5 posted 2011-12-20 08:12 AM

Thank you for reading my work

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

6 posted 2011-12-20 03:30 PM

Emma, this is achingly powerful. I wait for the golden one with you.

Michael

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

7 posted 2011-12-20 09:24 PM

And so... we wait.
Enjoyed your write Emma.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

8 posted 2011-12-20 09:49 PM

Emma....

how touching, and very full with imagery...

you set me back a pace, and then a century,
and then more. In other words, this poem
traveled the universe. Well done!

ice
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since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

9 posted 2011-12-21 05:07 AM

Power filled poetry here..I felt like I was one of them, sitting quietly, waiting for the sun to come up, and brighten the world.

tracie66
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since 2000-01-18

Posts 4713
Australia

10 posted 2011-12-21 06:50 AM

intense, touching, powerful - well penned

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe
— W. E. Channing

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