Open Poetry #47 |
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You said I reveal to much |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams ![]() |
You said I reveal to much My hand pressed against the paper Empty and void of any words Before I could word out my thoughts I thought about what you had said Your voiced cracked when you talked to me Your eyes caste down -mine fixed on you And I was left to interpret whether your worries were for me -Juju -"So you found a girl Who thinks really deep thoughts What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos [This message has been edited by Juju (11-28-2011 12:43 AM).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Fine writing...James |
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Alison![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I agree with James. A |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
"And I was left to interpret whether your worries were for me" Enjoyed the poetry. (Now I want to know were they??) Love your style. JL ![]() Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Succinctly, yet sensitively written - as I expect and always receive from you, my friend. A warm spot from me to you . . . j. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Isn't that the case, always? The one in the wrong cannot look the one wronged in the eyes, and usually mumbled incoherent word sounds. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Larry C![]()
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Well done. Very well done. |
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