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Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

0 posted 2011-01-23 05:14 PM

Oh, such a vehicle!
So smiley and wide,
a comfort that seemed
would last forever.

Struggles twisted the shining
and rust seemed so small at first,
take care of rust,
rub it out, rub it out,
sings the morning quietly.

Could we but matriculate into our years
then graduate with lively lust intact,
a house with a picket fence,
(almost paid for)
and travel to places
where destiny surely waits,
and will always wait.

But truly,
would it matter if you had your cup of tea
in the morning
and a beer at sunset?
The other side of youth just is
all of a sudden.
Like a coin flipped and riding circles,
it falls
and settles
and you can’t turn it over,
not with a sigh or a promise.

So lets feed this precious minute
pieces of our flesh
and look at the sky where stars wink,
conspirators in some grand design,
capture its essence,
pull out all the worth of it
and fill it up to tomorrow,
for there is no polish that will
rub out time.

------
A repost from 2000 with a bit of a tuneup

JerryPat
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since 2010-10-30

Posts 1991
Louisiana/America

1 posted 2011-01-23 05:30 PM

Sadly you have taken the situation in hand and have given us much to read and think about. I think it boils down to this thought, grab life for all it is worth.

~ Good health is merely the slowest possible rate at which one can die. ~

The_Doctors_Angel_32
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since 2011-01-14

Posts 337
Florida, USA

2 posted 2011-01-23 05:52 PM

This is an awesome poe. It is a thought provoking piece.

When the family is together, the soul is at peace - Russian Proverb

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2011-01-23 06:27 PM

Every great poem likes to be polished,
Sissie...and you rubbed the shine on
this one just fine!

secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

4 posted 2011-01-23 07:14 PM

"So lets feed this precious minute...

capture its essence,
pull out all the worth of it
and fill it up to tomorrow,
for there is no polish that will
rub out time(!)"

what a grand-fine expression of 'now-ism' !

VERY well 'penned' !

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

5 posted 2011-01-23 07:21 PM

You have faced down "time" superbly. Martie.
You have such wonderful grace and style.
Ida

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

6 posted 2011-01-23 08:17 PM

"Could we but matriculate into our years
then graduate with lively lust intact"

...cool phrase in a very thought-provoking write

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

7 posted 2011-01-23 08:59 PM

The other side of youth just is
all of a sudden.
Like a coin flipped and riding circles,
it falls
and settles
and you can’t turn it over,
not with a sigh or a promise.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Once again you make my breath catch, you are such a grand and glorious poet, Martie.
Your message is lovely, and the way you express yourself moves me to tears.

Thanks for this beauty~

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

8 posted 2011-01-24 12:36 PM

"The other side of youth just is
all of a sudden.
Like a coin flipped and riding circles,
it falls
and settles
and you can’t turn it over,
not with a sigh or a promise.

So lets feed this precious minute
pieces of our flesh
and look at the sky where stars wink,
conspirators in some grand design,
capture its essence,
pull out all the worth of it
and fill it up to tomorrow,
for there is no polish that will
rub out time."

That is just so Martie
Repost and tune up much enjoyed and loved the pearls of wisdom.

Eric

when you don't create things, you become defined by your tastes rather than ability. your tastes only narrow & exclude people. so create.

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

9 posted 2011-01-24 08:25 AM

Yea! another Martie poem! Of course it was a treasure of words. Loved where you went with this...every line a "polished" gem.
Lori

threadbear
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since 2008-07-10

Posts 817
Indy

10 posted 2011-01-24 04:29 PM

Hi Martie!
don't we all wish we could polish our rougher moments,
sanding time?

Wonderful writing, Martie-gal!
Jeff

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