Open Poetry #47 |
Quiet Places |
Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
Quiet Places I wonder if I'll get use to deathlike, quiet reality Or a existence broken down Into so many parts and shards Maybe I'll never put it back To how it was before the dawn But just like all my thoughts and dreams Eventually all things will change juju -Juju |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
When you attempt to "put things back," Juju, there seems to always be a missed part that makes the whole. Take stock of where you are now and improve upon it. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways ~*~ |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
You are absolutely right -Juju |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
"But just like all my thoughts and dreams Eventually all things will change" Love this poem!! Very much insight in "Quiet Places". Enjoyed. JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
"Maybe I'll never put it back to How it was before the dawn" But does one really want to. ms. e |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
It does feel like a death when the anticipation, the excitement, and lovely excruciating touch of being understood seem to be gone forever... Your last lines portend some interest of hope in a curve up ahead in the road, though. I like that much. I do very much enjoy your thoughts, and thank you for sharing--you continue to surprise and inspire me. |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
things never stay the same.. everything changes around us.. we need to keep moving! Lovely writing Juju! Bisous RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Change is indeed the only constant, your awareness is powerfully expressed. "Quiet places" seem in contrast to youth, they are temporarily quiet only ... Beautiful! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I really like this!! Beautiful contemplative write! |
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