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Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

0 posted 2011-10-18 11:19 AM

My mind is scattered
on the winds of change
My heart holding words hostage
waiting on rhyme’s ransom
for their release
from their incessant swirling
just out of reach
Lay me down
in a field of dreams
and I will watch
the cloud’s ever-changing
shapes and shadows go by
their images on parade
in my mind’s eye
I long for you
like pen and paper
to tap my flow
Take my chaos
upon your calm
Use your prowess
as my balm

LGR©10/18/11

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2011-10-18 11:20 AM

Y'know, don't you, that this is
a priceless ransom...

sending sissie hugs...

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

2 posted 2011-10-18 11:25 AM

Today I will take your word for it

Thanks my Warm and Sunny friend.

Lori

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

3 posted 2011-10-18 11:28 AM

Great thing to do, lay on your back and watch the clouds drift by, Lori. Take pen and paper. Ideas will come and form into lines of your poem. Been there. Done that. Yep.

~* The saddest words of tongue or pen are the words It might have been.--John Greenleaf Whittier ~*~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

4 posted 2011-10-18 11:41 AM

What rhymes with zzzzzz?

lol
Thanks Jerry

Lori

Richy
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

5 posted 2011-10-18 03:09 PM

My heart holding words hostage
waiting on rhyme’s ransom
for their release

ummm..

violets are.. red
roses are blue
here is my poem
I know its dum
but look who its from

lol

Lori, your words are always so enchanting..
never change, okay..

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

6 posted 2011-10-18 03:34 PM

Okay, Just for you, I shall forever remain
the same ole, same ole, me.

Thanks for your poem, um
It was cute, not dumb!

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

7 posted 2011-10-18 05:00 PM

The entire poem was engaging and tweaked my heartstrings, however, these words will most assuredly remain in the coffers of my mind ~ "I long for you like pen and paper"...

Linda

Richy
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

8 posted 2011-10-18 05:26 PM

thanks Lori, but i just cant think of you in anyway as, same ole..

you always make me smile lol

thanks for that!

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

9 posted 2011-10-18 11:59 PM

"My mind is scattered
on the winds of change"

Gotta agree with Sunshine on this.
Nice.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

10 posted 2011-10-19 06:18 AM

Richy- nice to know there is a smile out there somewhere with my name on it. Thanks!

this smile's for you.

Lori

___________________________________________

JL-if you agree with Sunshine you know you have to be right (just ask her lol)
Thanks

Lori

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

11 posted 2011-10-19 09:13 AM

My heart holding words hostage
waiting on rhyme’s ransom
for their release
from their incessant swirling
just out of reach
-------
I long for you
like pen and paper
to tap my flow

I love this, Lori... Beautiful write!

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

12 posted 2011-10-19 09:20 AM

Thanks, *S* I value your thoughts. Thanks for sharing them.

Lori

secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

13 posted 2011-10-20 08:40 AM

fine writing !!

EmmaRose
Senior Member

since 2011-03-02

Posts 1376
Midwest

14 posted 2011-10-20 09:06 AM

You know well of the love affair a poet has with words. Understood here

Michael

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

15 posted 2011-10-20 06:53 PM

This one is deep and rich, Lori. Lovely imagery... "incessant swirling"

A thoroughly enjoyable read.

Michael

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