Open Poetry #47 |
Awareness and Fear |
JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Awareness and Fear Tonight we swim... Alone, silent, in eerie darkness. Plight swells on imagination, green illumination. Painted faces, departing souls, creeping within the jungle’s flora, hidden as chameleon’s sons. Lessons learned now revealed external covering of a poacher skin... Looking down range counting klicks with precision soon to find, as moonlight dances between effervescent trees and peering effervescent creatures watching, as if aware even more… Drawn breath echoes within an inner ear, awareness and fear echoed with cold sweat. Soon somewhere a fatherless child, wife’s no husband’s farewell, an unanticipated loneliness tonight. Now, now… whispered with no tears, seamless continuity, no breach, report and clear. Downing a frozen bitter chill, a taste swallowed, understood, and confined, quiet patience unmoving breath, In the blur of a dream skilled trade done, completed tasks – regroup back with wolves of the dark, a retreating pack, nervously whispering, ‘well-done’, ‘well done’… Thoughts recollected from current application, a moment, never to be undone, or ever erased from minds so young. Young boys as men, sometimes pretend, and not to be dismayed ever again. Beyond thoughts, a burning soul, alone – a tear, something this pack must never hear… Repeat, repeat. Always ready, always alert, never forget, awareness and fear. *** Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. Maranatha! |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
This took me to "and there but by the grace of God go I" and horrors of war. It pushed every button I have on the subject.... They call that well done...even if that wasn't where you intended to go. You took me on a very powerful and unpleasant trip. Excellent write. Lori |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Thanks for reading Lori, and your reply is most appropriate. JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
never to be undone, or ever erased from minds so young. This took my breath away... Powerful, poignant write! |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Thanks suthern. JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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bslicker
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
enjoyed |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
Much insight in your poem, appreciated, ms. e |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
"Painted faces, departing souls, creeping within the jungle’s flora, ..." You built around this well, my friend, and put one there... well done, well done. j. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
I held my breath while reading your impressive and heartwrenching poem, dear JL. Oh, those moments must be beyond what we can imagine, yet your words made me tremble inside. Margherita |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
quote: Love that stanza, I so can relate to that. Great depictions throughout. Truly enjoyable. Michael |
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