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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California 
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Hell I walk the silent riddle Of a long forgotten song, Caught somewhere in the middle Of right and what once seemed wrong. The taint is all around me, Cursed without – and cursed within! The darkness may confound me, But light alone reveals my sin. For joy is but a vapid thing, Challenged in my belief. Still, in the end angels will sing, If only of my grief. I stand an emptied man, a shell, Small price for dignity; Privy unto the private hell Of the man I once thought me. I wish I could just walk away, Or at least close these eyes. There’s nothing left that I could say That would be more than lies. I gave my all – I paid the price… And none of it for show, But know for you that won’t suffice… The kick before I go. Feigned affection – the afterthought, Somehow still bittersweet. I trade my health for life in rot – My suffering complete… And close my eyes to pilfered trust, That Death adorn these walls… But stand to breathe the silken dust, And march these endless halls. Michael Anderson But dreams — of those who dream as I, Aspiringly, are damned, and die EAP |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Speaking of someone who writes dark, forlorn poetry, you claim the prize, and I thought I was good until I ran into you. ((((This is a response to your comment on my "Maudlin" poem, Michael, nothing personal.))) ~*~ Tell me whom you love, and I will tell you who you are.--Houssaye ~*~ |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
You are very good at it JP... as well as nostalgia, and even the mushy stuff. Personal or not, I would not take offence... dark poetry is my forte.  It’s where I belong.Michael |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
I'll say...and your other stuff is really really good too! Your miserable is magnificent! Lori |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Truly you have described hell... in all its endless infamy. *S* Each verse is descent to another level of hopelessness... A superbly gripping write!! |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
can I just refer to suthern's comments 'cause she said it perfectly!! j. |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Michael...Your heart bleeds when you write like this. Maybe i'm crazy, but I can relate to your poetry like you wouldn't believe.You really put your feelings into each poem. You are a great poet but I would love to see you write blues songs so juur soul could bleed as well as your heart...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: I think that no one is immune to such a state of mind. Personally I prefer to focus on the light at the end of the tunnel, but I sure know of darkness. Your poetic rendering of the self inflicted hell is impressive and your skills are stunning. M |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
I'd much rather read your poem about it than visit the Hell you describe. Excellent Enjoyed |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Lori, well, misery loves company… through me something dark would ya? Ruth, this was written while going through my divorce with my first wife, and suffering from a life-threatening illness that eventually claimed my left lung. I waited patiently for death in those days, but when he never showed, I just sort of figured I was already in hell. I saw this while sorting through all my old work… thought it worthy of the post. Jwesley, I’ll let you get away with it this time… Paul, love of music is what started me writing. I’m a bit malnourished when it comes to the blues genre, however. Maybe I will pick some up and see what I discover. Any suggestions? Margherita, Indeed… there is always the Light. He has always seen me through, even in the bleakest of times. Rex, nice to see you poking your head in here. Yup, my poetry is kinda like that… a nice place to visit, but absolutely no one in their right mind would want to go there. I’m glad you enjoyed. Let’s see some more posts from you soon, ok? |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
"The darkness may confound me, But light alone reveals my sin." If there is any hope at all, it is in this line. It's what you do after that revelation. Enjoyed. JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Oh, dear Michael, I too, know where of you speak! Thank goodness we rose from the darkness and into the Light! What a poet! I believe the more experiences we have ~ either good, bad, or in between ~ all are grist for the poetic mill, so to speak!  Love & Light, EA |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
You know beyond the misery of hell that you write of - I loved reading this poem out loud to myself. It flows beautifully and you use words so darn well. A keeper, Michael. A |
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Michael
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Ah, I feel like Ichabod Crane in reading this… You have captured all of October’s wickedness here. Everything present serving only to make you dread what may yet be coming. Well done. Michael |
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