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Open Poetry #47

Old River Trail

The_Doctors_Angel_32
Member

since 2011-01-14

Posts 337
Florida, USA

0 posted 2011-01-21 06:27 PM

Written July 24, 2007

You walk along a long path
Through trees that you feel
Are enveloping you
You look around at the scenery
As you walk the old river trail

You see little pieces of the past
As you walk by an old cracker village
Which is now a ghost town
Until a fesitval comes through
As you walk the old river trail

You see where horses have taken the path
Because you have to avoid walking into their mess
As you walk the old river trail

You approach the river
Of icy, clear water
And just stare in awe
Even though you only see algae on the bottom
As you walk the old river trail

There are benches near the water
You sit and take it all in
You hear the nature around you
As you sit on a bench on the old river trail

When the family is together, the soul is at peace - Russian Proverb

JerryPat
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since 2010-10-30

Posts 1991
Louisiana/America

1 posted 2011-01-21 06:57 PM

Old river trails and dusty country roads are wonderful topics for the poet's heart. Sitting still, say on "benches near the water" give one pause to observe things, minuté things we seldom see in our hectic daily life's. Enjoyed this.

~ Life is sexually transmitted ~

XGarapanX
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since 2008-06-19

Posts 1435
Antarctica

2 posted 2011-01-21 08:29 PM

"You approach the river
Of icy, clear water
And just stare in awe
Even though you only see algae on the bottom"

Some interesting perspectives here, like this one.

·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!"

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

3 posted 2011-01-21 09:22 PM

the change in the last line spoke volumes to me...really liked this write

The_Doctors_Angel_32
Member

since 2011-01-14

Posts 337
Florida, USA

4 posted 2011-01-21 10:32 PM

Thank you all for your comments. I am glad you enjoyed my poem. I try to write things I experiece in life.

When the family is together, the soul is at peace - Russian Proverb

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