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JerryPat2
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0 posted 2011-09-29 06:00 PM

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Stretched out on a wire
When the day is almost done
Crows come back to roost

~~ Those who are silent are the first to be shot. ~~

1slick_lady
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since 2000-12-22

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standing on a shadow's lace

1 posted 2011-09-29 06:51 PM

Crows Weep

crows weep
I hear
them cry

as your
love for me
slowly dies

they hang
on the wind
pretending to fly

replaced by a breath
that once
was a sigh

now broken echo
lonesome winged
sound in reply

crows just weep
I hear them
cry

(Hope you don't mind)
helen

"I wish that I was beautiful or you were half way blind"
Harry Chapin

JerryPat2
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2 posted 2011-09-29 07:32 PM

Of course I didn't mind, although I think I'll go into the corner, hang my head, and cry you have made me look so bad.

Just kidding.

~~ Those who are silent are the first to be shot. ~~

Sunshine

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3 posted 2011-09-29 08:18 PM

a Dark morning

cawing sounds
onset,
against summer blue
they land,
ponderous,

black heavyweights,
feathered harbingers
[of death] spearing
tang open from
green apples
on young trees

bending branches
of limbs still thin enough
that their tarsus wrap
touching nail to nail

the dwarf tree resembling
a rookery,

one soul miniature
mockery of its cousins
divebombing, his
territory terrorized
and conquered

momentarily

so I go to snapclap
my hands, resembling
buckshot sound
advancing on the blackness

they wing off
only to perform highwire
exploits, talking back
all the while to the
trespasser on
two limbs who
cannot fly

snapclapping, echoes
bouncing off doorways
and back again, main and
side streets empty
as churchgoers
still sleep, blankets
gripped and pulled over
tousled heads

just black baggage
of thievery
and I

they wing off
but the miniatures
stay behind, reclaiming,
regrouping,
swinging down
on lighter fluff
to bring their fledglings
from the bushes

to feed on
fallen green apples

~*~

a good poem
begets a tagger-on-ner

Michael

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4 posted 2011-09-29 08:22 PM

JP, you seem to have inspired the masses. Well done on all counts here, helen & K included. Seeing as this is about crows, I'll join in just as soon as I figure out a rhyme for murder... and no, herder is not an option.

Michael

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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5 posted 2011-09-29 08:45 PM

Way cool! Inspirational!
Lori

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside

6 posted 2011-09-29 09:03 PM

Yea, very cool.... always nice to come home at then end of the day.

JerryPat2
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South Louisiana

7 posted 2011-09-29 09:05 PM

"a good poem / begets a tagger-on-ner"

Well, that was one hell of a tagger-on-ner, Sunshine. If hell is not correct usage of the word here, I'm sorry. Seemed to work.

I think you are correct, Michael, waiting on your inspirational murder piece.

Thanks, Lori, it is appreciated.

~~ Those who are silent are the first to be shot. ~~

JerryPat2
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8 posted 2011-09-29 09:06 PM

Thanks, Blues, and yep, it sure is, isn't it?

~~ Those who are silent are the first to be shot. ~~

Michael

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9 posted 2011-09-29 09:25 PM

Well, I was really just joking JP... but I gave it a shot anyway. And no –
I couldn't find a feasible rhyme for murder.

…And they gather, up on the wire.
My darkling clan – deepest desire.
But sit I, in the willow tree…
Where naught but shadow takes in me…

Where, after carrion they tarry…
While I watch in silence, wary,
In dream that I could share their flight
Somewhere beyond this lonely night.

But still more come, to fly – to roost…
Their blackness across the sky, loosed,
Till when the night is nearly done,
Naught remains but the murder of one.

JerryPat2
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10 posted 2011-09-29 09:34 PM

Damn, Michael, Poe to the nth. I liked this very much, thanks for gracing my page with it.

~~ Those who are silent are the first to be shot. ~~

1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace

11 posted 2011-09-29 09:42 PM

and btw
loved your poem and pic

JerryPat2
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12 posted 2011-09-29 09:51 PM

I keep thinking everyone is trying to tell me I should have done better. Haha!

~~ Those who are silent are the first to be shot. ~~

1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace

13 posted 2011-09-29 09:59 PM

not at all silly

JerryPat2
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14 posted 2011-09-29 10:04 PM

Yeah . . . Still, my little senryu was greatly overshadowed . . . I feel I live among great talent . . . Wasn't complaining . . .

~~ Those who are silent are the first to be shot. ~~

Sunshine

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15 posted 2011-09-29 10:29 PM

No, not at all, Jerry! I wrote mine years ago, you just made me REMEMBER it! I only brought mine in to share!

Crows/Ravens/the black ones of flight oft'times bring to everyone's literary mind the name of Poe [my dog is named after him, by the way...] and if one loves to write, then one will eventually bring the harbinger of poetry into the mix....

so thank you for allowing us to be [re]inspired by YOU!

Good job, Poet.

JerryPat2
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Posts 16975
South Louisiana

16 posted 2011-09-29 10:47 PM

I am happy to be of assistance, Sunshine, thank you.

~~ Those who are silent are the first to be shot. ~~

luminosity
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Posts 813

17 posted 2011-09-30 02:46 PM

Reverend Henry Ward Beecher once remarked that "If Men had wings and bore black feathers, few of them would be clever enough to be crows."
Whenever I see them, I always watch to see what they are up to......*grin* course I love birds......
enjoyed your write

Michael

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18 posted 2011-09-30 03:31 PM

Well, I started work this morning at dawn, (Installing solar panels), and when I climbed to the top of the ladder on the house I was working on; there sat at least 15 crows on the apex... The fact that there weren't there any yesterday gave me significant pause. The fact that I am writing this proves I survived the day... but not without some serious trepidation. Yes, I was spooked.

I can't speak for K. & Helen, but I was seriously inspired by your poem, JP, especially with the added pic. I just didn’t really think my two cents would compliment yours at first... That feeling you spoke of that a poet gets when he knows his work will be misunderstood. Personally speaking, my vantage point on just about anything you could throw out there will probably seem somewhat jaded to most people. That I did post a little verse in reply doesn’t mean you could have done better… only that I wished to share my perspective… and that I felt comfortable enough with you as a friend to do it.

It is a compliment that you moved others to write… you should view it as such.

Michael

JerryPat2
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19 posted 2011-09-30 03:55 PM

Thanks luminosity, I'm a crow/raven watcher too.

Thanks, Michael.

~~ Those who are silent are the first to be shot. ~~

luminosity
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20 posted 2011-09-30 04:49 PM

if words could fly

If words could take to the sky
mine would never choose
butterfly wings with never one
particular destination.
First up and then down
and next blown to and thither
by the whims of the breeze.

Weighted down by cares
and worries, mine would probably
baby eaglets be
screaming in protest each time
they are de-nested.
Clinging past
the promise
of outstretched wings
never to realize the splendor
of soaring
purely for the sake of flight.

But if words could fly
then tell me why
does even one poet remain grounded?
Why do we not soar to our heart’s contentment
coming to rest high in the trees
looking down on those
less worded than we?

And if it might be so wonderful
that words could fly
then why still
is there this distance
between us?

there have been many words between the birds and me......just sharing one with you

Margherita
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Eternity

21 posted 2011-09-30 04:53 PM

Very lovely, in picture and words, and so inspiring!

Love,
M

JerryPat2
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South Louisiana

22 posted 2011-09-30 05:06 PM

luminosity, I love the gist of the poem . . . "But if words could fly
then tell me why
does even one poet remain grounded?"

That just about says it all, huh?

Thank you, Margherita.

~~ Those who are silent are the first to be shot. ~~

icebox
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in the shadows

23 posted 2011-09-30 10:16 PM

It is a murder of crows,

JerryPat2
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24 posted 2011-09-30 10:19 PM

Yep. That's what it is, Ice, murder most fowl. Hah!

~~ Those who are silent are the first to be shot. ~~

suthern

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Louisiana

25 posted 2011-10-01 12:00 PM

Jerry: You have truly gifted us... first with your wonderful presentation of poem and picture and then with the poems you inspired other poets to write or post! For me, when a poem inspires creativity in others, that's a mighty testament to the original poem and great compliment to the poet. What I strive to do with my words is to touch someone else and you definitely succeeded here... Beautiful work!

JerryPat2
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26 posted 2011-10-01 02:00 PM

Yeah, just a little three line senryu and everybody jumped on it. Thanks, suthern.

~~ Those who are silent are the first to be shot. ~~

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