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Krawdad
Member Elite

since 2001-01-03

Posts 2597

0 posted 2011-09-28 01:09 AM

Silverware

I searched and searched
many places many days
through drawers and boxes
to find what was needed

the right long knife
tempered and hard
to carve out a life

the right tined fork
for more than just eating
to consume all my work

each expected to be just so . . .
the proper fingered fit
suitable in the hand
as if meant to be mine

but the simple spoon
the one that should be filled nightly
to nourish the rest of me

is yet unfound in its perfection
illudes my grasp
haunts my life's search
leaves me awake and hungry

easy1
Senior Member

since 2010-05-22

Posts 1209
Southeastern USA

1 posted 2011-09-28 01:18 AM

slyly profound, complete with timely spelling substitution... very good

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

2 posted 2011-09-28 02:30 AM

Very beautiful and masterfully carved, Krawdad. That last stanza consumes me, but is the consequence not what births your work and creates something you give yourself and others, and is not giving the most noble and rewarding and uplifting form of receiving?

Owl

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2011-09-28 09:26 AM

You've tinged life with sweet regret,
adding a touch of lemon to the tea we sip.

Well done, Kraw.

miscellanea
Member Elite

since 2004-06-24

Posts 4060
OH

4 posted 2011-09-28 11:08 AM

It's neat how you used such familiar items to cleverly express yourself. Have you ever noticed how often one is served less than three pieces of silverware? When I grew up we always set the table with the knife, fork, and spoon. Now, we may just get the fork! Very telling...

I enjoyed your writing very much.

miscee

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

5 posted 2011-09-28 08:00 PM

Very profound, indeed.
Enjoyed, Krawdad.
JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

katahdin
Senior Member

since 2010-07-01

Posts 1196
ME. In the Shadow of the Mt.

6 posted 2011-09-28 08:36 PM

Profound, nicely done, enjoyed!
Kat >^..^<

Amaryllis
Senior Member

since 2010-05-20

Posts 1306
Mi now

7 posted 2011-09-28 11:42 PM

Very well-written and realized

Best,
Amaryllis

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