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BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

0 posted 2011-09-27 07:46 PM

Holding my breath
I arch my back and dive deep
with a cool splash
tending to my underwater garden
with buoyancy and vibrancy
swaying in slow motion
the warmth of sun
penetrates the sheerness
leaving a shimmer that sheens.

I've no words to describe
what can't be heard.
no needs to be met
when I feel I'm drowning
I have no desire to be saved
from the peace in my mind
that stirs;
in the deepest part of my sea
and all that I hold sacred to me.
Where I've found my tranquility
my heaven on earth
swimming all around me
through me
with me
the silver strands of time
coveting me.

I've learned to change with the tides
and the constant currents that pull
forecasting undertows
that no longer frighten me.
For it is here on my sea
where I live and let go,
and come up for air ....

Where I breathe~

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2011-09-27 07:55 PM

This "underwater garden" of yours, Blues, is one that I, and probably many who read this, envy. To be able to maintain, with a certainty, that you care not to be "saved," tells me that your most ardent needs are met as you repast in your garden.

"I've learned to change with the tides
and the constant currents that pull
forecasting undertows
that no longer frighten me.
For it is here on my sea
where I live and let go,
and come up for air ...."

The above says it all. I am grateful to know that you are as one with yourself.

~~ Those who are silent are the first to be shot. ~~

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

2 posted 2011-09-27 08:04 PM

Thank you so much for your great reply JP. I have my moments that's for sure, but I have made my peace....oh it was hard fought, but honestly I couldn't ask for more and I'm happy I finally arrived. Ha!! My life isn't flashy but it sure is grand....and there isn't any other place I'd rather be.

Thank you always for reading me and for your wise and wonderful thoughts.

Amaryllis
Senior Member

since 2010-05-20

Posts 1306
Mi now

3 posted 2011-09-27 09:32 PM

Lovely read, my beautiful mermaid!

I like the metaphor..life as an ocean, and not resisting..gorgeous.

Best,
A

Richy
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

4 posted 2011-09-27 09:36 PM

Oh Lori, I can’t tell you how happy I am for you, no matter what it is, that is making your life so peaceful and content at this point in your life. I couldn’t ask to hear anything better. It’s not easy finding such contentment, and I hope you hold on to it with all that you can. This garden of yours really does sound like heaven maybe someday I can find a place too that at least comes close to that.

Don’t worry too much about finding those words. They can be felt within, every time that breeze down by the sea exhales and dances with the trees, as the skies inhale and look down and smile….

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

5 posted 2011-09-28 03:19 AM

Blues, your poetry is always beautiful, but this, in my humble opinion, is your masterpiece! Wow, wow and WOW!

Owl

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

6 posted 2011-09-28 07:21 AM

babyblue...you have always had a way of dancing....your moves are so saxy..

latearrival
Member Ascendant

since 2003-03-21

Posts 5499
Florida

7 posted 2011-09-28 04:01 PM

Blues,I seldom post, but when I see your name I always pop in. You never disapoint. I love this poem and knowing you have found a peaceful life is good news. jo

icebox
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

8 posted 2011-09-28 05:35 PM

Simply beautiful.

Nicole
Senior Member

since 1999-06-23

Posts 1835
Florida

9 posted 2011-09-28 07:54 PM

I love how this "feels" when I read it; so free and light and peaceful. Thank you for this, I enjoyed it very much.

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

10 posted 2011-09-28 07:56 PM

"the warmth of sun
penetrates the sheerness
leaving a shimmer that sheens."

A beauty, Blues... Makes one want to dive in with you.
Much enjoyed.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

11 posted 2011-09-29 05:30 AM

quote:
Where I've found my tranquility
my heaven on earth
swimming all around me
through me
with me
the silver strands of time
coveting me.

Wonderful combination of beauty and wisdom, that wraps the reader into its refreshing, calming cape.

Extremely captivating write, dear Lori.

Love,
Margherita

Michael

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

12 posted 2011-09-29 01:31 PM

Wow... beautiful imagery. It's not often I'm at a loss for words, but I seem to be now. I loved it.
Michael

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

13 posted 2011-09-29 08:50 PM

Amaryllis~  Thank for your sweet reply, you made me smile.  I'm so happy you stopped by.

Richy~ Your warm replies touch me, and  like you,  I hold them dear.  Thank you for always being here.

Lady Owl~  That was so nice of you to say so, thank you good poetess.

DS~  You be the saxy one and I'll be the dark dancer, (I knew a gal by that name once upon a time)
Thanks for sharing the view, dude~

Dear Jo~  Thank you for visiting my poetry, I am honored by your kind words in reply.  Thank you so much.

icebox~   Thank you for looking me up.  Much appreciated.

Nicole~  I am glad you felt some of the peacefulness I was trying to convey.  So nice to see you here. Thank you.

JL~  Mabye in my next life I will be that girl from Ipanema, in my dreams maybe.

Thank you for enjoying the warm breeze and cool water.

Margherita~  You are ever so gracious and always so very insightful.

I enjoy your replies as much as I love reading your poetry.  Thank you dear heart.

Michael~ That's so nice of you, thank you very very much for your nice reply.

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

14 posted 2011-09-30 01:54 PM

You never disappoint, Blues. When I see your name I know I'm in for a good read.
Ida

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

15 posted 2011-09-30 11:49 PM

Peaceful and tranquil... and so beautiful it takes my breath!! I'm glad you know this, Bluesy!

ebonygirl
Member Elite

since 2011-07-14

Posts 2000
California U.S.A

16 posted 2011-10-01 12:44 PM

Enjoyed the tranquility of the deafening silence, ms. e

Krawdad
Member Elite

since 2001-01-03

Posts 2597

17 posted 2011-10-01 01:15 AM

"I've no words to describe
what can't be heard."
Now, come on, you can't fool a bunch of poets!

Drowning in peace of mind? How satisfying!

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

18 posted 2011-10-01 03:18 PM

Ida, suthern gal, and Ms e~
Thank you sincerely for stopping by to read me.
I guess I've always been a seaside woman at heart.

Uh Kraw~ Just so you know, I didn't miss your sarcasm.  Part of our poetic licenses as poets is our words and how we choose to express ourselves, i.e, love, happiness, sorrow, and all the beauty surrounding us.  In the worst of times, (even when I feel like I'm drowning, I am at peace because I know it's not going to kill me and yes, I find much satisfaction in that)  Perhaps taking everything in the literal sense works for you, but not for me. You might try thinking out of the box next time. whatever!!

karren29
Member

since 2011-09-29

Posts 85
philippines

19 posted 2011-10-04 04:01 AM

well what can i say, they said everything already... this poem took my breath away.. i loved it.. i wish someday i can write something as beautiful as this.. thanks for sharing..

"i wanna know how it feels to be over you for real, til i do, ill be writing POEMS about you"

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

20 posted 2011-10-04 11:14 PM

HI there karren, that's so nice of you to say.

Thank you very much.

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

21 posted 2011-10-13 03:23 PM

Oh, Lori, what an enlivening, refreshing, sense of peace and renewal ~ and so eloquently expressed! May I join you in those cool blue waters? Awwww.... the pause that refreshes!

Loveya!
Linda

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

22 posted 2011-10-14 11:36 AM

I thank you sincerely dear angle....it is indeed a good place to be.

Hugs to you, Linda~

soul drifter
Senior Member

since 2004-09-08

Posts 711
Colorado

23 posted 2011-10-14 03:20 PM

Ooh, like this one. a blues serenade indeed! This part here is my fav -

I've learned to change with the tides
and the constant currents that pull
forecasting undertows
that no longer frighten me.
For it is here on my sea
where I live and let go,
and come up for air ....

haul away, haul away. Tide at low or high ebb, you're sailing clear and blue and wonderful.

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

24 posted 2011-10-16 08:54 PM

Clear and blue and wonderful! Really?? Oh my gosh, you are full of suprises and I am so happy you stopped by.

I am delighted by your reply.

Thank you, soul drifter~

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