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MorningStar
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since 2009-10-26
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Pittsburgh, Pa

0 posted 2011-09-26 12:45 PM



I grew tired of all this
   The way it was
and what I'd let myself become

I needed to change
needed to care
   About my life
about living it

About not

I was tired
   Of me
being this way
all of the time

So I stood up
   I stood
and I got on

For me
for the better
   So I could be more
than I had been
before

I didn't step easily
and not always faithfully
   As old habits have many lives

Just more proof that it isn't always the first step
that's hardest
   Sometimes it's the ones that follow

The ones that carry you
further and further away
   From your familiar old
ruts and grooves

But life goes on
seasons change
   They begin
and they even end

Or at least they should

So when I grew tired
   Tired enough to be different
I was

Perhaps not easily
   Perhaps not all at once
but different
all the same

And soon
it’ll almost be like a second nature to me
   To walk around my life
looking for trees

So I can turn over
crisp new leaves


"I'll tell you how the sun rose
A ribbon at a time..." - Emily Dickinson

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suthern
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since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723
Louisiana
1 posted 2011-09-26 04:04 PM


it isn't always the first step
that's hardest
   Sometimes it's the ones that follow

The ones that carry you
further and further away
   From your familiar old
ruts and grooves

Amen and AMEN! *S* I've taken those first steps so many times it sounds like mere foot tapping. *S*

Good luck finding those trees! *S*

Nicole
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since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835
Florida
2 posted 2011-09-26 09:07 PM


Smiling... one step at a time, one day at a time.  Our journeys are often uphill; and the optimism and determination in this is inspiring.
JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
3 posted 2011-09-27 08:43 PM


. . . and viva la difference . . .

I was going to highlight the first step line, but I see it has already been taken, so I will persevere sans that dynamite line.

This life we live and the one we choose to change into is a slow metamorphosing kind of deal. To change suddenly is a shock to the system, much like going cold turkey from mainlining. Because this other life is all we know. By reading the poem I feel that you are more aware of these things than I, and that you have arrived at a better place and at your own pace.

Congratulations!

~~ Those who are silent are the first to be shot. ~~

OwlSA
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since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa
4 posted 2011-09-28 03:17 AM


Superb (as usual)! Bravo!  

Aenea, I don't know how I missed this one earlier.  No matter, I found it now.  Are you really as young as you are in your icon photo (or whatever the correct term is)?  Or is that just a symbolic photo and not you?  Either way it is an absolutely delightful photo and SO you!  Why I ask about your age (and I am not asking how old you are, as I know most people don't like divulging their age - although I don't think it would worry you) is that you seem far too young to have assimilated the amazing amount of wisdom you have - and very especially how much you have put it into practice.  I am nearly 66 and I am learning so much from you - sometimes not so much the facts, but a way of putting them - for example that STUNNING reply to Jerry's poem called "Repairing the Damage."

Owl

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere
5 posted 2011-09-28 08:25 AM


how well you have captured the nature of change!  Excellent!
Lori

JL
Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128
Texas, USA
6 posted 2011-09-28 08:02 PM


Well, as the cable guy says:"Get 'er done."
Enjoyed.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

katahdin
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since 2010-07-01
Posts 1196
ME. In the Shadow of the Mt.
7 posted 2011-09-28 08:33 PM


Nicely done, enjoyed!
Kat >^..^<

Krawdad
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since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597

8 posted 2011-09-28 09:20 PM


Lots to like in this including the crisp end.
Amaryllis
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since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306
Mi now
9 posted 2011-09-28 11:41 PM


I love the final couplet  

Amaryllis

MorningStar
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since 2009-10-26
Posts 290
Pittsburgh, Pa
10 posted 2011-09-29 12:47 PM


Suthern - Thank you!  Ya know, I don't mind a little tap dancing.  So long as I don't stop moving forward...even if it's just by inches.

Nicole - Thank you!  I'm tying to see the good.  And besides, climbing hills is an excellent way to firm you glutes and calves so I'll extra fabulous when I finally arrive. See - silver lining!!
Lol!

JerryPat2 - Thank so much!  The way I figure it, is that I only get this one life.  And if I don't take my time and figure it out.  Figure myself out.  And figure out what I want out of it - It'll be over.  And I'll have missed the best and most important parts...

Owl - Thank you very kindly indeed!   Actually I think that photo is only about 2.5 years old... I'm 32, byt the way.  Not as young as I used to be - but not as old as I hope to get.  If I know anything at all, it's because I've had good teachers, hard lessons, and asked lots of questions. And faith.  Faith can teach us so much about ourselves and the world around us...if we're patient and willing to learn. (Between you and me - sometimes patience isn't my strongest attribute)

Lori - Thank you!  Since everything changes, all the time.  I just decided to watch, listen and report.  

J.L. - LOL!! Thank you!

Kat - Thanks!  I'm glad you enjoyed my 2 cents worth

Krawdad - Thank you!  I figure, Autumn is just starting - and if the leaves can change...then so can I!

Amaryllis - Thank you!  It my favorite part too


"I'll tell you how the sun rose
A ribbon at a time..." - Emily Dickinson

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