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flash Member
since 2010-11-28
Posts 213miami beach, florida |
Palm Sunday Jesus' hands folded in solemn communion with the plastic flowers on my dashboard tumbled by the tides rushing in and out finally cracked open: how soft we really are beyond our lobster shells this bracelet you admire will never be worn again today I remove it from my wrist and you from my heart --Al |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Even an apparently strange place like a dashbord and plastic flowers can bring along a thought of "solemn communion". Very nice! Profound, beautiful metaphor in the second! You are determined in the third.  All three are most enjoyable. Thank you, dear Al. Love, Margherita |
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flash Member
since 2010-11-28
Posts 213miami beach, florida |
Margherita: Thank you so much for your generous response. Much appreciated. If you get a chance: I just posted a haiku titled "returning soldiers" that includes a heartwarming and heartwrenching youtube vid that I would love for you to view--but bring some tissues! I'd lend you mine--but I'm all out--from viewing the video several times. Thanks, Al |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Well, dear Al, had I read this before, I would have provided the hankies before reading and viewing the video indeed!! I am still innerly shaking. The emotions will linger! Thank you again!  |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Very nice Flash! JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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flash Member
since 2010-11-28
Posts 213miami beach, florida |
Margherita, JL: Thanks for your generous remarks. Margherita: Yes, that vid will linger in my memory for a long long time. Al |
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ken206573 Member
since 2008-10-14
Posts 487 |
Your tanka's are very captivating, simply wonderful.  |
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flash Member
since 2010-11-28
Posts 213miami beach, florida |
Thank you , Ken, Thank you very much! Al |
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