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1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2011-09-17 12:49 PM

I Could

if I could write you
it would be breath
a dream I have in daylight
I could say I love you
but they are mere words
and words are more
than what we have
where your hand
unlocks me in
the small of my back
the only master key
I could say you are
the matching page
on the other side
of life’s book
a drink from ache
the desire of need
I could read you
in brail across the night
where my fingers touch
stars chasing your prints
or listen to your echo
left in shells on beaches
whispering secrets
I can have this and more
I could, yes I could

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

1 posted 2011-09-17 12:56 PM

Helen, this is soooooooooooooooo beautiful and so, so, so you. As I said before, I am so glad you are back.

Owl

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

2 posted 2011-09-17 01:32 PM

Happy to see your name on these blue pages again, Helen. Never miss one of your poems.
Ida

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

3 posted 2011-09-17 02:00 PM

"listen to your echo
left in shells on beaches
whispering secrets
I can have this and more
I could, yes I could"

Amazing write!
Enjoyed.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

Aaron Snyder
New Member

since 2011-09-02

Posts 6
Dependent on my state of mind.

4 posted 2011-09-17 03:01 PM

Descending down through your words gives the feeling of descending into love. Very nicely done. Exquisite is the best single word I can find to describe this piece.

Itï¿½s long work I do.
My short pieces are so few.
I donï¿½t do Haiku.

Angel4aKing
Senior Member

since 2006-09-27

Posts 1372
USA

5 posted 2011-09-17 06:25 PM

WOW I am relating to this one....

~~~kingsangel~~~

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

6 posted 2011-09-17 07:50 PM

What can I say --- I love everything you write.

j.

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

7 posted 2011-09-18 01:57 PM

if I could write you
it would be breath
a dream I have in daylight

Your words enchant me so completely I forget to breathe... but even with breath, I can't verbalize my appreciation. Exquisitely beautiful!

Richy
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

8 posted 2011-09-18 08:45 PM

I could have this too Helen, who couldn't??

Have I ever told you how much I enjoy your poetry? I've got a feeling I have, and always will!

So, so beautiful.

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

9 posted 2011-09-30 11:38 PM

This is simply - well, it's simple and honest. I love it.

A

ebonygirl
Member Elite

since 2011-07-14

Posts 2000
California U.S.A

10 posted 2011-10-01 12:53 PM

So beautiful, ms. e

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