Open Poetry #47 |
Love Conversations in Tanka |
ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
"I Do Not Love You Except Because I Love You" (Pablo Neruda) * * Recieved in a text: "The dog threw up on the floor" Just leave it for me. "That's not fair", "I was venting" I love you, that makes it fair. *************************** I say I love you She answers "I love you to" She asks "in what ways?" I love you in every way Human love is possible. **************************** "Why do you love me?" "I am old, wrinkled, sagging" My eyes don't see that. To me you appear eighteen, Your age when I first met you. [This message has been edited by ice (09-18-2011 05:36 AM).] |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Superb, Ford, superb! Owl |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Very nice write. JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I enjoyed the opportunity to eavesdrop! *S* |
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flash Member
since 2010-11-28
Posts 213miami beach, florida |
Interesting conversations with self--lots of wry irony Enjoyed the read, Al |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
"No te quiero sino porque te quiero" the original sounds so good! (my husband conquered me reciting Neruda ... ) Dear Ford, I love all of your love tanka, each with its own unique "spirit of true love". Yes, there are so many ways, limitless ways to love. Most beautiful. Love, Margherita "Love is the One who masters all things; I am mastered totally by Love." (Rumi) |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Thank you, Diana...I love the word "superb" *************************************** Thank you JL, for the nice compliment..:-) **************************************** Suthern LOL...I encourage all voyeurs... **************************************** Flash Glad you enjoyed them... **************************************** Margherita Yes, the original line in Spanish does sound more romantic, especially when it is whispered by Neruda..(my favorite romantic poet) And I understand how a girl can be swept off her feet from such whisperings. "there are so many ways, limitless ways to love." indeed And I love practicing the art of speaking about it. All three of the tonka were from actual conversations with my wife/lover. |
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