Silhouette of the Swamp, Stagnation

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JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

0 posted 2011-09-14 10:17 AM

Its dark and creepy here.
In this south Louisiana swamp.
As creepy as it has always been,
darker thoughts have taken up residence here.
Stagnation is its name.
Stagnation is a carbuncle, which, if left alone,
will surely take the place of
actual living and breathing.
Look into the eyes of a person
smitten with stagnation.
You may have to look in the mirror.
Whatever.
You will see the desire of poor,
misguided souls with no chance in,
and for, life.
They are treading water
in a deep, cold cavernous pool of existence.
They think it unimportant to take on life,
to strive for all it holds,
they even make fun of those who do
seek a better way,
a more comfortable way of living.
The stagnant are content to sit home and wait for . . .
The Check.
This way they avoid being defeated
in the game of life.
Their life is
managed and controlled by Big Brother.
They do not fear defeat,
they don't run from it,
they embrace it.
Better to do nothing than to strike out on a new road.
For there may be a fork in that road,
thus a choice will have to be made.
They have never had to make choices,
somebody always does it for them.
If they choose to take a new road
where will it take them?
So, it is better to sit and mold,
grow old and ferment
into a hazy resemblance of themselves.
Generation after generation after . . .
To stagnate is to never see the sun.

~~ "Government is not reason; it is not eloquent. It is force. Like fire, it is a dangerous servant and a fearful master." --George Washington ~~

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

1 posted 2011-09-14 10:44 AM

"Its dark and creepy here."

Enjoyed the read.
Man, I can't wait for Vol. 2!
Now I'm all creeeeeeped-out.
Add in a few characters and some action and you would have a Friday night TV special.
I had visions of British romantic zombie comedy directed by Edgar Wright - Shaun of the Dead.

You have a gift to put into words what others can only see at the movies.

Really enjoyed.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2011-09-14 11:01 AM

Appreciate it JL. Thank you for being here.

~~ "Government is not reason; it is not eloquent. It is force. Like fire, it is a dangerous servant and a fearful master." --George Washington ~~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

3 posted 2011-09-14 11:29 AM

"...generation after generation..." it is a cycle that is inherently demoralizing. Some have never tasted the sun...They have no idea what they can do or how good it feels. It is very sad and frustrating at the same time. Good write my friend.
Lori

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

4 posted 2011-09-14 01:09 PM

Yep, you are absolutely correct, Lori. There are would-be genesis being wasted away. Some have cracked the steel doors of dependency, but the percentage is not that high.

~~ "Government is not reason; it is not eloquent. It is force. Like fire, it is a dangerous servant and a fearful master." --George Washington ~~

luminosity
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since 2005-11-18

Posts 813

5 posted 2011-09-14 03:14 PM

wow, how accurately you paint your words
great write

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

6 posted 2011-09-14 04:10 PM

Thank you very much, luminosity, I appreciate the comment and the fact that you are here in my space.

~~ "Government is not reason; it is not eloquent. It is force. Like fire, it is a dangerous servant and a fearful master." --George Washington ~~

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

7 posted 2011-09-14 04:24 PM

Very much to the point, m'friend.

Have you noticed that they are performing another annual ritual in New Orleans?

The cleaning of the roof of the superdome.

(It turns green every year from mold, or possibly even envy...)

And somehow, there's still no place like home. Enjoyed the poem much, Jerry.

I think I just talked myself into an Allegra, too. *hugs*

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

8 posted 2011-09-14 05:23 PM

Thanks, serenity, but you have to be careful of those Allegras. Didn't know it was dome cleaning time.I think it turns green in celebration of all those greenbacks that pass hand therein.

~~ "Government is not reason; it is not eloquent. It is force. Like fire, it is a dangerous servant and a fearful master." --George Washington ~~

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

9 posted 2011-09-14 05:39 PM

Fine writing...lots of substance here...James

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

10 posted 2011-09-14 07:29 PM

Thank you James.

~~ "Government is not reason; it is not eloquent. It is force. Like fire, it is a dangerous servant and a fearful master." --George Washington ~~

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

11 posted 2011-09-17 09:58 PM

They do not fear defeat,
they don't run from it,
they embrace it.

Some have never known anything else. And it's not just in the swamps. *sigh* Bad situation... good write!

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

12 posted 2011-09-18 07:39 AM

Oh, I understand it isn't just in the swamps, suthern. It is everywhere, even worldwide. Eventually when more take than the once that can pay there will be anarchy and riots in the streets of America.

~~ I'd kill for a Nobel Peace Prize. ~~

Krawdad
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since 2001-01-03

Posts 2597

13 posted 2011-09-19 01:36 AM

"to never see the sun"
or consider the moon . . .

Such a perpetual waste, from anyway you look at it.

Still, a fit topic for the poet.

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

14 posted 2011-09-19 06:49 AM

Thanks Krawdad, I appreciate it.

~~ I'd kill for a Nobel Peace Prize. ~~

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