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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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so slender is this then, our ocean like but a window thin between hello sounds and what we call our much more heavenly kind of music and you bring your woman waters slowly as if they were too heavy to carry or lest you spill a drop upon the sand and my mouth misses your full intentions you read my eyes with hungry fingers and kiss commas between the lines leaving residue I will return for often as you smear it over your wanting places so there is no place left for imagination when my ravenous is fully aroused and your fragile is partially broken just enough you say, to seep whiskey and make me drunk on your predictions _____________ daark |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
Enjoyed your poem, Dark, but can one think when drunk? Ms. E |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms E....one thinks more clearly then...without inhibitions, thanks ms |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
"Get drunk and stay that way. On what? On wine, poetry, virtue, whatever. But get drunk." (Charles Baudelaire) Doesn't allways have to be whiskey that we get drunk on. I enjoy your poetry, Dark...it often reminds me of other great poets. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
icebro...thank you for the reads |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Your poetry is better than whiskey or wine to bring on an energizing high ... inebriating indeed. Pliny the Elder said "In vino veritas" ... (in wine there is truth), just as you say with other words in your comment. But your poetic use of "drunk" here is different. Love, Margherita |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
like but a window thin between hello sounds and what we call our much more heavenly kind of music Intoxicating are your words... and they don't give hangovers. *S* |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Ms Mar, you bless me lady friend. ________ Ms Suthern, join me for drinks? Thanks lady |
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Angel4aKing Senior Member
since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372USA |
"so slender is this then, our ocean like but a window thin between" to get lost in ocean's slender is to find ones-self is it not?? Beautiful glad I stopped to read now off to do some algebra!!! ~~~kingsangel~~~ |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Algebra, leaving them in the wash too long will cause that, no need to wear one on my account. Thanks babe |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice...James |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
James thank you |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
"... as if they were too heavy to carry.." Enjoyed your imagery, Dark, Ms. E |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms E...perhaps several trips then...thanks ms |
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