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JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

0 posted 2011-09-13 06:58 AM

A Visit with You

What warm amber flickers within your heart this evening?
Mere thought for only a moment of this day?
Or
reflection of the depths of the deepest of seas?

What profound sentence would you prescribe for tomorrow?

One that sets the world alight with passion,
desiring adamantly with hunger to taste your every word?

Or
Will your shyness hinder your thoughts
into a concealed study?

Are you a morning dove cooing and praising the rising sun
blessing a new day of life and living?
Or
are you an eagle soaring high
above the snowy mountaintops,
surveying God’s gift to you?

Whatever your contemplation,
wherever you may go in your heart
and in your mind,
allow me a visit there too.

Go on –
Sing your song for the day.
Write your lyrics, and poetry.
But gratify and grant my curiosity –
invite me in to consider
your thoughts,
to visit with you…

Just for a moment of your time
it would be for me
a day of warm sunshine and affection.

A cherished day –
A visit with you…
*

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2011-09-13 08:33 AM

JL...this is a beautiful letter.
Thank you so much for sharing it!

Especially liked this:

Are you a morning dove cooing and praising the rising sun
blessing a new day of life and living?

Or
are you an eagle soaring high
above the snowy mountaintops,
surveying God’s gift to you?

~*~

"The business of the poet...is to show the sorriness underlying the grandest things and the grandeur underlying the sorriest things." Thomas Hardy

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2011-09-13 09:11 AM

What an interesting piece of writing, JL, and I admit I have never read a poem directed at the poets, writers, et al that would read it. That is a lovely thought. I used the word lovely instead of great or impressive, or any number of other words, because I believe we all have lovely thoughts from time to time and that it is not a gender thing.

Anyway! Congratulations on this. It is -- now I can say it -- impressive.

~~ "Government is not reason; it is not eloquent. It is force. Like fire, it is a dangerous servant and a fearful master." --George Washington ~~

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

3 posted 2011-09-13 12:13 PM

I almost highlighted the same section Sunshine did... how glorious it would be to not have to choose and be both. *S*

But these are lines that surely will make many a heart wish they were the recipient:

Whatever your contemplation,
wherever you may go in your heart
and in your mind,
allow me a visit there too.

Go on –
Sing your song for the day.
Write your lyrics, and poetry.
But gratify and grant my curiosity –
invite me in to consider
your thoughts,
to visit with you…

So very tender and incredibly beautiful!!

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

4 posted 2011-09-13 01:36 PM

What an invitation! Really special write.
Lori

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

5 posted 2011-09-13 06:55 PM

You have allowed us to visit YOUR HEART through this beautiful piece of poetry, and the visit was well worth the time!

Very captivating thoughts and visions.

Inspiring!

Love,
Margherita

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

6 posted 2011-09-13 07:18 PM

Sunshine:  Thank you so much.  Your critique is, as always, very uplifting and generous.
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Jerry2Pat:  Thank you sir.  I appreciate the congratulations.
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Suthern:  Sweet lady.  What can I say?  Thank you for your very kind reply.  I was going to ask for sugar for my coffee, but I’ll just use your reply instead.
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Lori: Thank you!!
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Margherita: I am so glad you enjoyed the thoughts and vision.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

7 posted 2011-09-14 02:08 AM

This is so very, very breathtakingly, quiver-beautiful and sensitive, JL. Like all the other women reading this I am sure, I was tempted to answer the questions in a moment of fantasy . . .

Owl

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

8 posted 2011-09-14 08:49 AM

Thank you OwlSA! You sure know how to get someones attention!!

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

9 posted 2011-09-14 01:26 PM

Delightful reading, JL.
Ida

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

10 posted 2011-09-14 02:20 PM

What a sweet thing to say, JL!

Owl

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

11 posted 2011-09-14 05:34 PM

Nice...James

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

12 posted 2011-09-14 09:31 PM

Thanks, Ida and JamesLee.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

ebonygirl
Member Elite

since 2011-07-14

Posts 2000
California U.S.A

13 posted 2011-09-14 11:02 PM

Thank you JL for this heartfelt poem,
Ms. E

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

14 posted 2011-09-15 09:25 PM

Thank you Ms. E. You are always so kind with your warm replies.
JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

15 posted 2011-09-17 10:16 PM

Back for another visit... and loving it all over again. *S*

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

16 posted 2011-09-17 10:38 PM

I liked everything about this piece, my friend, but like Sunshine thought the dove and the eagle were really special.

j.

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

17 posted 2011-09-18 08:38 AM

Suthern: Thank you! You are always welcome for a visit, any 'ol time you want.

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Jwesley: Thank you sir.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

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