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JerryPat2
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0 posted 2011-09-07 07:18 PM

Yea, the sweetness of youth heavenly blessed,
Will eventually fade away and die,
We forge on n'er thinking burial dress,
We're growing old 'ere we reach for the sky.
See us in our prime, walking on the moon,
We smell the sweet nectar of our life's scent,
Not knowing life's path is liberally strewn,
With the odor of our own discontent.
When truth finally visits our abode,
We weakly cry, come back sweet youth, come back,
We'd dearly like to change things on life's road,
But time goes forward into death's pitch black.
Life is a gift, live it with that in mind,
How you walk the walk is how you're defined.

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Lori Grosser Rhoden
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1 posted 2011-09-07 07:45 PM

too true my friend. Excellent write. Love the language.
Lori

JerryPat2
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2 posted 2011-09-07 08:03 PM

Hi Lori, mucho thanks for checking in here. Wherever here is, I sometimes wonder . . .

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JL
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3 posted 2011-09-07 08:54 PM

"Life is a gift, live it with that in mind,
How you walk the walk is how you're defined."

Yes sir Mr.
Excellent write and statement.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

JerryPat2
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4 posted 2011-09-07 09:38 PM

Appreciate the nice comment, JL, and thank you for being here.

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suthern

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5 posted 2011-09-07 09:48 PM

Very true... beautiful write!

JerryPat2
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6 posted 2011-09-07 09:51 PM

Thank you very much, suthern, for your comments and for just being here.

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OwlSA
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7 posted 2011-09-08 02:54 AM

Lovely, Jerry! Truth in its stark, but beautiful reality of the negative leading to the positive, and an excellent lesson in the well-blended mix!

Owl

JerryPat2
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8 posted 2011-09-08 07:58 AM

Thanks Owl, this aging process has caused many lines of verse. I just added mine to the mix,

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Margherita
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9 posted 2011-09-08 08:00 AM

Excellent sonnet, dear Jerry! Those
thoughts that grab us sometimes are very well expressed.

No doubt about changing a few things if we could go back! Personally I wouldn't want to go back, even though I am well aware of the mistakes in my life. I am the sum now of what I have done, just as you conclude. It was a learning process somehow. While our old bones become fragile, our awareness becomes stronger. Youth remains intact deep within, as a feeling of enthusiasm for existence, but we must give it the chance to surface.

"Young in the heart" we say to comfort maybe someone, but it is the key to wellbeing no less.

Great, thought provoking write, as always.

Love,
Margherita

"Love is the One who masters all things;
I am mastered totally by Love."
(Rumi)

JerryPat2
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10 posted 2011-09-08 09:58 AM

I'm of the opinion, Margherita, that things could have been set up a little differently. That is if the concept of one entity conceiving and bringing everything together under His own power.

My concept of youth is strong, as you said, within me, and that is why I understand the youth of today as they rebel. I rebelled in my own fashion. It is how it it, the young throwing off the old. The only thing I worry about is that the youth of today (except a few) are not educated in many respects, especially of they went through the public educational system. Brainwashed? They most certainly are that, and it is scary.

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Sunshine

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11 posted 2011-09-08 04:27 PM

We forge on n'er thinking burial dress,

~*~

I must confess, I still haven't
bought THAT dress!

JerryPat2
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12 posted 2011-09-08 05:36 PM

I wasn't actually thinking of buying the burial dress, Sunshine, just maybe thinking of the future, and "that" day and what it could mean to different people in our sphere.

Thank you for taking the time to read my poem and comment on them.

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Sunshine

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13 posted 2011-09-08 05:51 PM

Ah, there was a story behind my comment.
My MIL lost her husband in 1978, and I met
her son in late 1979. When he brought me
"home" to meet her prior to our marriage,
she was showing me around the house, and
commented to me that I would have to make
sure that when it was her time, [as she went
to her closet] to bury her in "this dress."
She pulled out a lovely Kelly-green dress
and I had by now anticipated that she was
planning on me being her DIL [good] but I
was surprised that she already had her
funeral plans laid out, even down to the
underwear.

We didn't pull that dress out again until 2008.

I seem to be running across poems today that
bring a lot of memories scurrying back to me.

Paul Wilson

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14 posted 2011-09-08 05:55 PM

JP2...You are so right. Life is so short. It seems when we are young we have the get up and go , but then when we get old, our get up has gone. Enjoyed your sonnet poem...Paul

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

JerryPat2
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15 posted 2011-09-08 06:13 PM

Oh, okay, now I know, Sunshine. Funny.

Ain't that the truth, Paul. Thank you for being here.

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ebonygirl
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16 posted 2011-09-08 11:03 PM

"HOW you walk the walk the walk is how you're defined",
Wow, lots of trueth, enjoyed,
Ms. E

JerryPat2
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17 posted 2011-09-08 11:14 PM

Yes indeed, Ms. E, that us the only barometer woe4th looking at. Thank you for being here,

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