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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2011-09-07 06:47 AM



does it bother you
that I write of the dawn
with such familiarity
as if we were intimate
or had been before

and when the night lingers
tugging at my tattoos
with naked damp fingers
as if insatiable had returned
does it bother you

or those afternoon moanings
when you whisper helpless
that you didn't plan it
but your body just made you
and you need to go after

does it bother you
that I write of the dawn
with the same familiarity
as you and I are intimate
or had been many times before

when it didn't bother you

_______

daark

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Margherita
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1 posted 2011-09-07 09:34 AM


You write of the dawn with the same familiarity as if you were the sun's son rising together with her every day and pouring light all over the Earth, smiling while all the darkness fades.

You may call yourself Dark, but you know of the Light.

This is deeply charming and ... doesn't bother me in the least

Wonderful!

Love,
Margherita

Dark Stranger
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2 posted 2011-09-07 09:41 AM


ms mar

dawn is that fine thin seam where dark and light meet...thanks lady friend


Sunshine
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3 posted 2011-09-07 01:10 PM


You may write of worms,
and it will all turn to
sensuous wrigglings, I'm
sure.

Just don't stop.


Dark Stranger
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4 posted 2011-09-07 01:18 PM


Sweetsun

I hope my words always whet your interest. Thanks babe


MorningStar
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5 posted 2011-09-07 01:24 PM


Wow... Who's complaining?  I'm not, in fact I don't mind at all!  This is just beautiful.

"I'll tell you how the sun rose
A ribbon at a time..." - Emily Dickinson

Dark Stranger
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6 posted 2011-09-07 01:37 PM


Ms star, you bless my pen

Thank you


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7 posted 2011-09-07 08:58 PM


It sure doesn't bother us! LOL I know that's a selfish response... but sometimes a gal just has to be greedy. *G*
Dark Stranger
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8 posted 2011-09-08 07:17 AM


ms suthern...greedy is my favorite kind of candy....bring me a suthern helping?  thanks babe
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9 posted 2011-09-08 11:11 PM


It doesn't bother me at all.  You make the dawn that much more enjoyable (and I am not a morning person).

A

ebonygirl
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10 posted 2011-09-08 11:14 PM


Enjoyed your poem, Dark,
Ms. E

Dark Stranger
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11 posted 2011-09-09 06:27 AM


ms ali-san, thanks little one

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ms E..thanks for the read ms

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