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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois 
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 Only in findings now do you realize that your outer shell has nothing wrong. Your in-contempt for yourself lies within your heart and not your skin. What vile things do you see within that could not be caught within the mirror? Which monster lies within your arteries pulse? What shadows lurk within your heart? Veins track a path across sultry skin yet oil courses through channels into the waste pool that is your heart. Why it must be so? |
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Word Weaver Member
since 2011-03-06
Posts 437California, USA |
Brilliant write that speaks pure truth. LOVE the graphic. I have an owl living on my property. We've become good friends. Marcia www.thewritingforum.net |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Which monster lies within your arteries pulse? What shadows lurk within your heart? Powerful poem and wonderful picture make a striking presentation! |
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faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA |
great imagery and a powerful delivery help make this a great poem...i applaud you Love-Faith There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
E.A. Poe like reflection. Excellent write, great imagery. JL  Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
Well done Falling rain, enjoyed your poem, Ms. E |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
Weaver - There's actually a reason why I put an owl for this poem. Owls are symbols of wisdom and this owls eyes are so reflective and wide, kind of like my poem. I love owls as well. JL - That's a strong compliment! Thank you! I love E.A. Poe's work sooo much. Suthern, Faith, and E - Thank you for reading and commenting. I truly appreciate it. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Zach, here's a light critique...try using different words [repetition is one thing if it sings]; i.e., "within" was used again and again...and that might expand the pondering touch you've given this poem. The photo is wonderful! I do enjoy reading you! "The business of the poet...is to show the sorriness underlying the grandest things and the grandeur underlying the sorriest things." Thomas Hardy |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
Ahhh, right. I did use that a lot. ^_^' Of course, I didn't notice that. Thank you for pointing that out though, Sun! |
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