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The Upstairs Neighbor
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The Upstairs Neighbor |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana 
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 Uploaded with ImageShack.us Here I sit, not understanding Why the young woman from upstairs Knocks on my unlocked door Every night Before walking through it She’s such a pretty little thing Willowy look of perfection in the moonlight’s shaft She speaks as she walks toward me So delicate and soft is her voice Still, I understand her all too well She repeats the same words Each night she comes to me I have missed you She says, smiles, blows me a kiss Then she comes to me Touches me Administers to me In her own peculiar way I ask “Why me? Why? Precious one, Why me? Why do you come to me?” She says . . . I sup from your weakness, it makes me strong. ~ I like long walks, especially when they are taken by people who annoy me. ~ |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
ALL TO REAL! JERRY, Stunning poem, enjoyed, Ms. E |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank yew, Ms. E, very much appreciated. ~ I like long walks, especially when they are taken by people who annoy me. ~ |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
 Jerry, Jerry... Cold water on a washrag to the forehead, or a cold shower dude... Interesting write my friend... JL   |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Cold water won't help, she is draining my blood. Would that a glass of water would suffice and she would leave me alone. Please, help me |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
fine writing, Jerry, Horror chick flick!  "The secret behind survival of mankind is kindness and love within our hearts" |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
That's about it, Prasad, thanks . . . ~ I like long walks, especially when they are taken by people who annoy me. ~ |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Pretty intense Jerry, I like where you went with this. Lori |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Good morning, Lori. Thank you much for your comment. ~ I like long walks, especially when they are taken by people who annoy me. ~ |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
The picture frightened me ... but your impressive poem speaks about the girl's shrewdness and as long as you deem her "precious" she will go on gently knocking ... and closing the door doesn't seem an option. Enjoyed your wirte, dear Jerry. Love, M |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Hah! Precious is different for different folks, Margherita. I tried to portray that he was involved in a situation beyond his control. Sorry the picture scared you, and thank you for coming by, reading and commenting. ~ I like long walks, especially when they are taken by people who annoy me. ~ |
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chickoo007 Member
since 2007-11-06
Posts 70India |
Does the girl have a sister jerry ??? I am planning to change my residence :p ... loved the write !! |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
I don't know if she has a sister or not, chickoo007, but she does speak of her "coven." Thanks for stopping by, it is appreciated. ~ I like long walks, especially when they are taken by people who annoy me. ~ |
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luminosity Senior Member
since 2005-11-18
Posts 813 |
I love poetry that paints a people 'picture' |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you very much for taking the time to read and comment on my poem, luminosity, it is appreciated very much. Yeah, I like to "get" into people, and often have a fun time doing it. ~ I like long walks, especially when they are taken by people who annoy me. ~ |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
...was going to off to 'stand-in' for you, my friend so you could have a night off - but, my wife doesn't want me around 'strange' women... C'est la Vie enjoyed... j. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Yeah, that's just like a wife, huh, Mr. J? Thanks for the almost offer, I'm getting weaker and weaker . . . ~ I like long walks, especially when they are taken by people who annoy me. ~ |
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