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Your Superman
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Your Superman |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana 
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when our love was young I could do no wrong your eyes told me I could do no wrong I reveled in that knowledge puffed my chest out grinned like I knew something nobody else knew even when I was wrong you would tell anyone I was not wrong you went to bat for me I don't remember when the cracks started and you were silent about my mighty exploits but gone were the days of me being your Superman you began to notice my misdeeds, my wrongs yes, you were silent at first just refused to back me up I, of course, noticed it among other things soon enough you began to criticize, to harp you spoke loudly of my faults and decisions somewhere along the line you saw me for what I was just a man, with faults you didn't want that kind looking back is hindsight but I have to, you know there's not a man alive that would measure up oh, you were so haughty superior in your judgment in your daily criticism until finally I'd had enough in the end you cried to think I would leave you I guess I just didn't understand your faults weren't as big as mine *Thanks to Margherita for the edit at the end. ~ I like long walks, especially when they are taken by people who annoy me. ~ [This message has been edited by JerryPat2 (08-28-2011 12:26 PM).] |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Such is love and yet people pursue it endlessly. Must think it worth the effort. Ida |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Absolutely Ida, by the time we have figured it all out it really doesn't matter anymore. Freedom. Thank you for being here. ~ I like long walks, especially when they are taken by people who annoy me. ~ |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Cool write my friend...perspective always depends on the side of the fence you're viewing from. Infidelity is truly the only place one can point full blame on one individual as there is no excuse for it before formal separation of some type. Other than that, as the axiom says . 'it takes two'. enjoyed the read. j. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Appreciate the time you took to read and comment on this poem. Yep. It takes two is absolutely correct. ~ I like long walks, especially when they are taken by people who annoy me. ~ |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
" ... your faults were as big as mine" would have fitted better my expectations I think, dear Jerry, but of course you know best! You have described the phases of love's play so very well. In the beginning we can't see the shadows, as we bask in each other's sunlight, but the shadows are there without exception. True love only can stand the test of taking off the pink glasses from our eyes. I think oh so many can relate! Love, Margherita |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Yep. You rewrote it perfectly. Thanks, Margherita. ~ I like long walks, especially when they are taken by people who annoy me. ~ |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
you tell it so true and well. Lori |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you Lori. Always and forever appreciated. ~ I like long walks, especially when they are taken by people who annoy me. ~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...they say it takes about 2 years after we "fall in love" to get to the point where we can truly love the object of our affection, without the distration of "falling in love"...James |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Yep, James, as we all know it is falling in lust for the first few years before reality and real love has a chance. ~ I like long walks, especially when they are taken by people who annoy me. ~ |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
It hurts when you go from being seen as better than you are to not being seen at all... I went from delight to drudgery. *S* |
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faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA |
i love how your poem is full of raw reality...a sad but masterfully penned poem...i've missed you, JerryPat! There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Faith and S, thank you for reading and commenting on my poem, but I am no longer a participant here at PiP. Thank you again. |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
Dear JP2, I guess it does take two, but does it have to take 2 years for the rose colored glasses to come off? Anyway, I enjoyed your poem, Ms. E |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you, Ms E, for reading and commenting on my poem, but I am no longer a participant here at PiP. Thank you again. |
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Haf_Alive Member
since 2011-09-04
Posts 56High in the Sky |
as far as i'm concerned, flaws and faults and the past are stepping stones in a relationship to help it grow. sounds like she was holding you back. thanks for the read |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Oh how soon the cape does fade, quickly, and abrupt as a rattlesnake bite! But even the lioness looses her teeth in time. Nice write JerryPat2!  JL  Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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