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Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2011-08-23 06:49 AM

I would measure the distance
between my word planting
lest you know of my rhythm
and wait at the end of my days
to see how long I journeyed

I would sprinkle these poems slowly
letting each of them find root
in the hollow of empty places
where they would become ornaments
and eventually empty would be full

I would walk with my eyes closed
lest a flower distract my obsession
and I would stop to smell of heaven
then consider salvation a healing
that was enough since it was mine

I would only dream of you in evenings
and that tomorrow you would arrive
with armfuls of embracing moments
and the time to spend, spending them
until I was saturated within a lifetime

that only happened when I blinked my eyes

____________

daark

miscellanea
Member Elite

since 2004-06-24

Posts 4060
OH

1 posted 2011-08-23 10:54 AM

Daark,
Amazing poetry! This is by far my favorite of yours and one of the best I've read. A keeper, for sure.

Misc'

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

2 posted 2011-08-23 10:58 AM

Ms Misc you punish me with blessings. Thank you lady.

soul drifter
Senior Member

since 2004-09-08

Posts 711
Colorado

3 posted 2011-08-23 12:03 PM

Wonderful. Surely one of the best things I've seen of yours. Saving and savoring this one...

secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

4 posted 2011-08-23 12:07 PM

VERY fine indeed !!

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

5 posted 2011-08-23 12:11 PM

Soul Drifter, thank you for the touch here..

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2ndhanddreams...thank you so much for the read

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

6 posted 2011-08-23 04:45 PM

This reads like a cool rain in the heat of the night.

Especially love this side of you, dude~
On Q.....

*siiiiigh*

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

7 posted 2011-08-23 04:59 PM

Thank you babyblue for the sigh sips

ebonygirl
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since 2011-07-14

Posts 2000
California U.S.A

8 posted 2011-08-23 07:23 PM

Why does this one move me to tears...
Ms. E

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

9 posted 2011-08-24 05:16 PM

You know about the importance of timing ... desire grows in intensity when heaven seems out of reach.

Outstanding work!

Love,
Margherita

naturegirl
Member

since 2009-09-30

Posts 168
England

10 posted 2011-08-24 09:22 PM

i like this very much especially

"I would sprinkle these poems slowly
letting each of them find root" also

"I would walk with my eyes closed
lest a flower distract my obsession
and I would stop to smell of heaven
then consider salvation a healing"

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

11 posted 2011-08-25 07:32 AM

ms e....not sure why ms...

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ms mar, thanks so much lady friend

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naturegirl, thank you for the touch ms

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

12 posted 2011-08-30 06:00 PM

When I think I've read something so special it has to be your best, you come along with another gem that finds still another plane of greatness and settles gently on my heart. This is beautiful and touching and I love every line! *S*

Angel4aKing
Senior Member

since 2006-09-27

Posts 1372
USA

13 posted 2011-08-31 03:21 AM

Different then the your usual for sure but I liked it, it's much softer ....

And I absolutely LOVED the ending .....

"I would only dream of you in evenings
and that tomorrow you would arrive
with armfuls of embracing moments
and the time to spend, spending them
until I was saturated within a lifetime"

'that only happened when I blinked my eyes'

~~~kingsangel~~~

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

14 posted 2011-08-31 07:23 AM

ms suthern...thanks babe

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ms king, thanks lady friend

bel1e
Senior Member

since 2006-07-24

Posts 1631

15 posted 2011-08-31 09:23 AM

damn...I had to blink for second too...almost didn't recognize you~~~

this is lovely, daddy~

Weight is the measure of the force with which a body
is drawn down to the center of the earth,

heavy, the heart stores its wealth in the jejunum,
and so your soul is all cognac, so generous,
you imagine marrow in ways I can't,

for me, it's blood that moves the body to dance,
inertia is the tendency of a body to resist its fate,

and the truth is, I'm beautiful,
& worthy or not, I am --- have always been,
the song inside your anxious red branching,

so when you think of it now, as ever, it aches
and rises in red, red ounces of slim elation.

[This message has been edited by Balladeer (08-31-2011 10:01 PM).]

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

16 posted 2011-08-31 10:16 AM

Lil dark chip, your eyes smile me.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

17 posted 2011-08-31 01:01 PM

So very, very much happens
in a blink.

So much so that one might even
hear the wind moan.

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

18 posted 2011-08-31 01:38 PM

Sweetsun, always blink slowly. Thanks lady.

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