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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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Unlimited If my senses were restricted And I was given a choice If I could hear only one sound I would ask to hear your voice If my eyes opened to darkness And I was robbed of most sight If I could just gaze on your face Everything would be all right If my tongue were to lie useless And my taste ceased to exist I would still know the greatest feast If my lips could taste your kiss If the smell of summer roses Could never be mine again I’d remember times inhaling Heaven’s scent upon your skin If my senses were to fail me Whatever the duration If I felt your arms around me There’d be no deprivation |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
"Unlimited" love and passion and beauty, dear Ruth! Now that's some statement that will resound eternally in the chest of the receiver! Absolutely delightful and enjoyable. Love, Margherita "Love is the One who masters all things; |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Ms suthern, ya can always pretend all that stuff and use me however ya want. Lovely love words lady. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Quite beautifully composed, mostly I have a feeling is because it come straight from the heart. ~ Man who stands on toilet is high on pot. ~ |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Unlimited: Limitless, unrestrained, infinite, unrestricted, boundless, and indefinite… I had to look it up...  “If my senses were to fail me Whatever the duration If I felt your arms around me There’d be no deprivation” Wow, such devotion to another. Sounds like love has conquered. Whoever he is, he should see this. Beautiful write!! JL  |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Wow! If this was written with anyone in mind, they'd better grab tight before you get away!! Wonderful expression of love here, my friend. jwesley |
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Daddy Goose38 Member
since 2010-09-04
Posts 430obama's a rice paper tiger |
This is lovely. One day in school this guy asked me to the effect that if I could see for five minutes what would I want to look at? Sighted people often think we are “deprived” when we can’t see clouds, sunsets, colors, pretty girls, flowers, etc. Just to be perverse, to humor him, I said I wanted to look at dirty pictures of naked women performing blank disgusting acts with animals blank blank blank etc. That’s why they call it the “naked eye.” Actually I don’t remember what I told him. About every ten years or so I get accosted on the street by a Jehov’s Witness type who tells me that God can heal me so I won’t suffer “like that.” Whatever “like that” is. Someone once said did I blame God for my “situation.” Whatever my “situation” is. What about your “situation? What about everybody’s “situation?” I never met a person, sighted or blind or deaf or whatever, who didn’t think life was a mouthful and moaning and complaining about how unfair the world is. Life is full of wonder, ragged endings, and pains in the you-know-what. Though I had normal hearing as a child, I went deaf quickly while I was in college and my life started falling apart. Now I think I’m over it, but even now when someone wants me to listen to some beautiful song or music, I still stutter trying to tell them that, actually, I do not hear music, except in a rudimentary way; mostly it’s just raucous, nerve-jangling noise. When I could hear, I didn’t know that I could write. Now I’m mostly deaf, and yet we such wonderful tools for reading and writing that just did not exist in 1973. Anyway this is probably above and beyond whatever you’d like to know so I shut up. now. Jaime |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Ruth, this is a very beautiful love poem, and paints your kind, compassionate heart with the paintbrush of a very fine artist. Owl |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Elegant words from the heart, Ruth. Enjoyed. Ida |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Compassionate writing,beautiful thought. "The secret behind survival of mankind is kindness and love within our hearts" |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
This is so soothing....It is poetry like this that moves me, it lingers under my skin, stirs deep in the heart, and feels so warm and so right. Love ya suthern gal! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Hello darlin'.  And this is lovely--it's you.  It reads like it was written with a quill, and there's an elegant frailty of a victorian-style valentine to it. Lovely. Just lovely. Just you.  |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Sacred, devotional and loving, your words sum up love and like our need for air the need for love...fantastic poetry... Thank you.. Goldenrose. Friendship is Love without his wings. Lord Byron. |
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luminosity Senior Member
since 2005-11-18
Posts 813 |
wow...I am so far from remembering a passion as you have written that it seem a foreign language you write...sigh...but just as when you hear someone speak beautiful words in a language you do not understand but some thing tells you that what is being said is beautiful...well something inside me knows that your words...are beautiful......sigh |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
Suthern, Your poem is so sensual, I can feel him too. Beautifully written, Ms. E |
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naturegirl Member
since 2009-09-30
Posts 168England |
truly beautiful, and beautifully expressed juliex |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Margherita: Thank you so much! I can't ask for any better reception than what you gave it! Dark: I do so appreciate the sacrifices you're willing to make! LOL Seriously... thank you so much... for the kindness and the smiles!! Jerry: You'd be right. Thank you very much!JL: You honor me first by devoting the time to look up definitions... then by your wonderful comments. Thank you so much for both! jwesley: Thank you very much... and I wish! *S* DaddyGoose: Thank you for liking this!! It wasn't written frivolously... Deafness is hereditary in my mother's family as is blindness in my dad's... giving me lots to think about. Owl: You see me through such loving eyes... I hope you always do! Thank you!!! Marchmadness: Thank you so much! I'm so glad you enjoyed! Prasad: Thank you very much! This one means a lot to me. Blues: What a beautiful and generous response... Thank you so very much!! serenity: I love that thought of quilled words... and love you bunches... Thank you!! Goldenrose: That is exactly what I hoped to do... thank you so much!!! luminosity: Thank you, dear friend... very much!! And (((HUGS))), O&O!! ebonygirl: Thank you so much!! I appreciate your comments! naturegirl: When I first tried to write this, I left it unfinished because there were things I couldn't express... so I thank you so much for your response! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
One of your finest...James |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
OMG...I want this read at my funeral! This is absolutely one of the best of yours I've ever read! Kudos, young lady! You've done yourself proud! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
James: Thank you so much!! Sunshine: I hope that funeral is decades away, dear lady... but you do honor me greatly. *S* Thank you so much... this one's special to me. *S* |
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