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ice
Member Elite

since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

0 posted 2011-08-22 06:15 AM

Stopped on red,
Glance around
You find
Fixation
Eyes on eyes.
*
Your mind speaks
Ignore-
Divert-fein
Disinterest
Fix your collar
Tame a curl
Tilt your mirror,
Check the gauges
Raise the radios sound.
*
You dont have to turn,
To know they're still looking
As their stare is mirrored,
In temporary permanence
Within the sensate chiasm
Of your brows third eye.
*
Antenna's
Vibrate oddly
As the door
That never opened
Closes,
When the light turns green.

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

1 posted 2011-08-22 10:33 AM

This is wonderful, my friend...and if I had to pick a favorite part - it would be the photo -
excellent composition, it could stand on it's own, without the poetic emphasis, and still say volumes.

Well Done!

j.

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

2 posted 2011-08-22 02:30 PM

Dear Ford, how extremely captivating!

You rendered those intense moments of consciousness so impressively well.

Love,
Margherita

ebonygirl
Member Elite

since 2011-07-14

Posts 2000
California U.S.A

3 posted 2011-08-24 09:24 PM

Why didn't you say hi?
That would have been nice,
Enjoyed,
Ms. E

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2011-08-24 09:26 PM

Such a fixation...
knowing well
what is at home.

Well done!

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

5 posted 2011-08-25 01:10 AM

"You dont have to turn,
To know they're still looking
As their stare is mirrored,
In temporary permanence
Within the sensate chiasm
Of your brows third eye."

Nice one.
Love this verse, maxed the brain.

JL

ice
Member Elite

since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

6 posted 2011-08-25 08:25 AM

Jwesly
Thank you for the kind review.
It took me a while to find that picture...but it was perfect...a pronounced third eye, and the red and green colors of the traffic light, in the flowers, and leaves to mimic the words in the poem.
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Margherita
I am so glad you saw this, and made such a nice review. Love it when you read my stuff...:-)
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EBG
Ummm I am married, but still alive, so I only look. It is the odd feelings one gets on occasion, when your eyes become crossed with another, especially of the opposite sex, and there is a fixation. This is what the poem is about, that general feeling.
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Sunny
"Such a fixation...
knowing well
what is at home."
Indeed I do know..Thank you for reading.
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JL
Oh, those are my favorite lines in the poem...a pivotal point, that leads to the light turning green.
Thank you.

Come read to me some poem,
Some simple and heartfelt lay,
That shall soothe this restless feeling
And banish the thoughts of day.
Longfellow

Prasad Nataraj
Senior Member

since 2008-05-29

Posts 1149
Bangalore,India

7 posted 2011-08-26 01:28 AM

can very much relate to these beautiful lines, fine writing.

"The secret behind survival of mankind is kindness and love within our hearts"

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

8 posted 2011-08-26 12:26 PM

Very cool blink of the eye. Love it when that happens!!!

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